It's early to judge, but... let's begin. A high end game requires a team of programmers, and years of work. This tale implies one person can smash it all together alone in a few days... At a minimum make the reader find some plausibility to the early plot. Also, game mechanics and structure are thrown at us before we care about any single character. Not engaging. Hope it gets better.
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