Review Detail of Pegaz in The Idle System
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The Idle System
Pegaz
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NeverBurnout:I'm enjoying this novel a lot recently, and I hope you get Number 1~ Although my novel is gonna challenge you! (ADVERTISEMENT) Finding the blood path!
I would love to, but the webnovel bug is still active, until they complete it then I'll risk losing 20 chapters again. When it's fixed i'll sort it out, been a writer for just under 3 weeks so please forgive me for my bad grammar at this point.
reader001:Please also fix your grammar, i cringed every time you write "you're" instead of "your" and "he's" instead of "his". Sorry, i'm just that kind of guy. Aside from that though, your story is very good!
Pegaz:I would love to, but the webnovel bug is still active, until they complete it then I'll risk losing 20 chapters again. When it's fixed i'll sort it out, been a writer for just under 3 weeks so please forgive me for my bad grammar at this point.
There will be no harem, can guarantee you that but as for romance, have been thinking about it and maybe someone comes further down the line.
Darkdelusion:Will there be harem/romance/none?... well, either way is fine.
Currently, I'm only thinking about it and if there is romance it will be further down the line, in a few chapters from now you'll understand why. More than likely no harem though.
TFH:SUP!! wanted to ask if there is a heroine in your novel, and if it will have romance on it, with that i mean the mc has a girl he likes and wanna live with her and be together with her. If so, do you plan the mc to have only 1 girl or be a harem?
nice, so its a Late Romance then, with only 1 heroine? not bad, she gets to recieve 100% the love, i just ask that she has long fire red hair!, red hair on girls is hot in more than 1 meaning xD
Pegaz:Currently, I'm only thinking about it and if there is romance it will be further down the line, in a few chapters from now you'll understand why. More than likely no harem though.
sup pegaz, just wantedo to share my opinion about the sin system of c67.... even if the MC knows how it works and if over 100 sin is a lot or not, we readers have no idea, so it would be awesome if you could clarify just how sin system works. For example a point of view could be that the sin points on people represent how much will the MC get should he kill that person and not how many sins that person have, an example would be a baby will neat the MC 1000 sin points for killing it for example. IF thats not the case then sin points amouth represent the severity of the sins that person have commited... so it needs to be clarified how do person get sin points in the first place.... If a child needs to steal food to survive, will he get 1 sin per each time he steals??? if so then he would get over 400 in less than a year..... So based on that my best bet and best outcome would be the sin points to represent how SEVERE are the sins that a person have commited... And a base line would be helpful to compare... like a regular person that its not either good or bad, have commited few sins such as stealing a little in his life, how many sin points will that person have? all we know is that when danny supposedly killed an innocent he got 25 sin, which was WAY more than killing person with a lot of sins... so did the sin system changed from the mc??... Also will a person who killed criminals, will he have sin points??
It's already been described (but not in great detail because MC doesn't know, yet), not sure where though, I think maybe in the next few chapters, didn't describe it straight away to let peoples imagination run a little wild lol.
TFH:sup pegaz, just wantedo to share my opinion about the sin system of c67.... even if the MC knows how it works and if over 100 sin is a lot or not, we readers have no idea, so it would be awesome if you could clarify just how sin system works. For example a point of view could be that the sin points on people represent how much will the MC get should he kill that person and not how many sins that person have, an example would be a baby will neat the MC 1000 sin points for killing it for example. IF thats not the case then sin points amouth represent the severity of the sins that person have commited... so it needs to be clarified how do person get sin points in the first place.... If a child needs to steal food to survive, will he get 1 sin per each time he steals??? if so then he would get over 400 in less than a year..... So based on that my best bet and best outcome would be the sin points to represent how SEVERE are the sins that a person have commited... And a base line would be helpful to compare... like a regular person that its not either good or bad, have commited few sins such as stealing a little in his life, how many sin points will that person have? all we know is that when danny supposedly killed an innocent he got 25 sin, which was WAY more than killing person with a lot of sins... so did the sin system changed from the mc??... Also will a person who killed criminals, will he have sin points??
well... readers imagination are already running wild just like you wanted LOL, go read the comments, there are some fun points. On my part i said that the system could screw over MC by displaying sin points on innocent people to fuk him up... or the system has a flaw or bug like his iddle one has where it counts ANY sin to the counter.... To avoid that i would ask for an update of the sin system to display a window with the sins details, such as killed X innocent people = 40 SP, raped 23 girls = 60 SP, stolen a candy 149 times = 1 SP or it could be stolen a candy 149 times = 149 SP(tell me, how many times in your life you have stolen food as a child.... i think this would be over 100 lol), and with this factor of candy that person is already seen as a huge sinner.... i mean, a system with bugs its hard to be trusted and MC should know that, seen how the idle system screwed him over quite a few times already. Also can the sin points of a person decrease? what about accidents? the person found a treasure, but it was a qi bomb, played with it, it started to glow and shake, the person throws it out far away and it kills a city...... in a meaning it was an accident, so does he gets sin points? if so how many since he didnt want that to happen? like, he gets 50 sin points for that rather than 500 because it was an accident? In my particular opinion the sin system should only add sin points when the sin was done deliberately and with EVIL intentions(by evil means that the victim did not deserve what it was done to him), how many points it adds depends on how severe the sin is. This way, the assasins of the rogue sect would not gather much sin points since while they did murder was not for evil, and they did investigate so they dont get innocents involved.
Pegaz:It's already been described (but not in great detail because MC doesn't know, yet), not sure where though, I think maybe in the next few chapters, didn't describe it straight away to let peoples imagination run a little wild lol.
TFH:well... readers imagination are already running wild just like you wanted LOL, go read the comments, there are some fun points. On my part i said that the system could screw over MC by displaying sin points on innocent people to fuk him up... or the system has a flaw or bug like his iddle one has where it counts ANY sin to the counter.... To avoid that i would ask for an update of the sin system to display a window with the sins details, such as killed X innocent people = 40 SP, raped 23 girls = 60 SP, stolen a candy 149 times = 1 SP or it could be stolen a candy 149 times = 149 SP(tell me, how many times in your life you have stolen food as a child.... i think this would be over 100 lol), and with this factor of candy that person is already seen as a huge sinner.... i mean, a system with bugs its hard to be trusted and MC should know that, seen how the idle system screwed him over quite a few times already. Also can the sin points of a person decrease? what about accidents? the person found a treasure, but it was a qi bomb, played with it, it started to glow and shake, the person throws it out far away and it kills a city...... in a meaning it was an accident, so does he gets sin points? if so how many since he didnt want that to happen? like, he gets 50 sin points for that rather than 500 because it was an accident? In my particular opinion the sin system should only add sin points when the sin was done deliberately and with EVIL intentions(by evil means that the victim did not deserve what it was done to him), how many points it adds depends on how severe the sin is. This way, the assasins of the rogue sect would not gather much sin points since while they did murder was not for evil, and they did investigate so they dont get innocents involved.
Agreed, I haven't read it yet, but I want to. However, I'm unfortunately (depending on your point of view, I suppose) quite pedantic when it comes to that sort of thing and while I could forgive one or twice - if those mistakes were to happen frequently, it would be more than enough for me to drop any novel... even if I love the story, constant aggravation over the writing, spelling, punctuation, grammar etc, prevents me from enjoying what would otherwise be a great novel. So please take care with that sort of thing, if you can't handle it yourself, please consider asking someone to edit it for you prior to posting. Finally, don't misunderstand me - much like the writing of this comment - the grammar, punctuation, spelling, etc doesn't need to be perfect... it just needs to be without any major/obvious/absurdly large & constant problems/mistakes/flaws. I'm sorry if I sound too demanding or anything, but I promise you, if that sort of thing is fixed and the story is as good as it sounds (based on both the synopsis & comments), you can expect lots of 'ratings', 'Power Stones', etc from me... and I would wager from other peoplw as well. Cheers, Guy
reader001:Please also fix your grammar, i cringed every time you write "you're" instead of "your" and "he's" instead of "his". Sorry, i'm just that kind of guy. Aside from that though, your story is very good!
I forgive you & you'll improve as you keep going. But if you're struggling with that sort of thing at the moment, you should ask someone to edit for you before posting your chapters. Also, about the no harem thing - đđđ good job!! Now I'm even more interested to read it!!
Pegaz:I would love to, but the webnovel bug is still active, until they complete it then I'll risk losing 20 chapters again. When it's fixed i'll sort it out, been a writer for just under 3 weeks so please forgive me for my bad grammar at this point.
I've not read this yet, BUT, from my understanding of the 'Sin System' based on reading this comment... I agree that the points should be attributed according to the severity of the sin rather than the number... or both, but not just the number; stealing some bread to survive or lying to avoid hurting/worrying someone, should NOT be equated to rape, torture, murder etc. However, I disagree with the idea that accidental sin shouldn't count... if you hirt someone, you hurt them, whether you set out to hurt them or accidentially hurt them in passing, it doesn't change the hurt you've inflicted... when you commit manslaughter, you still receive punishment, less that if it were murder, but you're geeks accountable none the less... I think it should be the same; if a sin is commited by accident, you get half the sin points you'd get had you done it deliberately with 'evil intentions'... for example. 'Half the points' is simply an example. I'm just suggesting that using the previous example of accidentially killing a city, he should DEFINITELY recieve sin points for killing all those people, destroying a city, etc. I do agree that had he deliberately set out to kill a city full of people, he should get more sin points... But even with it being an accident, he still destroyed countless lives - not just the ones he ended, but the friends & family etc, who were outside the city... from the people hunting/gathering in nearby forests to the people who are studying or working elsewhere trying to make it big and make their family back home proud... I'll grant you that I'm getting a bit over the top, but I'm trying to make it clear that that sin can't just be washed awash because 'I didn't mean to'. Anyway, I'll shut up now, you're the author, it's your decision to make. I just wanted to put my two cents in... even if two cents ended up more like twenty dollars. Keep up the good work. Cheers, Guy
TFH:well... readers imagination are already running wild just like you wanted LOL, go read the comments, there are some fun points. On my part i said that the system could screw over MC by displaying sin points on innocent people to fuk him up... or the system has a flaw or bug like his iddle one has where it counts ANY sin to the counter.... To avoid that i would ask for an update of the sin system to display a window with the sins details, such as killed X innocent people = 40 SP, raped 23 girls = 60 SP, stolen a candy 149 times = 1 SP or it could be stolen a candy 149 times = 149 SP(tell me, how many times in your life you have stolen food as a child.... i think this would be over 100 lol), and with this factor of candy that person is already seen as a huge sinner.... i mean, a system with bugs its hard to be trusted and MC should know that, seen how the idle system screwed him over quite a few times already. Also can the sin points of a person decrease? what about accidents? the person found a treasure, but it was a qi bomb, played with it, it started to glow and shake, the person throws it out far away and it kills a city...... in a meaning it was an accident, so does he gets sin points? if so how many since he didnt want that to happen? like, he gets 50 sin points for that rather than 500 because it was an accident? In my particular opinion the sin system should only add sin points when the sin was done deliberately and with EVIL intentions(by evil means that the victim did not deserve what it was done to him), how many points it adds depends on how severe the sin is. This way, the assasins of the rogue sect would not gather much sin points since while they did murder was not for evil, and they did investigate so they dont get innocents involved.
GuyB:I've not read this yet, BUT, from my understanding of the 'Sin System' based on reading this comment... I agree that the points should be attributed according to the severity of the sin rather than the number... or both, but not just the number; stealing some bread to survive or lying to avoid hurting/worrying someone, should NOT be equated to rape, torture, murder etc. However, I disagree with the idea that accidental sin shouldn't count... if you hirt someone, you hurt them, whether you set out to hurt them or accidentially hurt them in passing, it doesn't change the hurt you've inflicted... when you commit manslaughter, you still receive punishment, less that if it were murder, but you're geeks accountable none the less... I think it should be the same; if a sin is commited by accident, you get half the sin points you'd get had you done it deliberately with 'evil intentions'... for example. 'Half the points' is simply an example. I'm just suggesting that using the previous example of accidentially killing a city, he should DEFINITELY recieve sin points for killing all those people, destroying a city, etc. I do agree that had he deliberately set out to kill a city full of people, he should get more sin points... But even with it being an accident, he still destroyed countless lives - not just the ones he ended, but the friends & family etc, who were outside the city... from the people hunting/gathering in nearby forests to the people who are studying or working elsewhere trying to make it big and make their family back home proud... I'll grant you that I'm getting a bit over the top, but I'm trying to make it clear that that sin can't just be washed awash because 'I didn't mean to'. Anyway, I'll shut up now, you're the author, it's your decision to make. I just wanted to put my two cents in... even if two cents ended up more like twenty dollars. Keep up the good work. Cheers, Guy
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