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Li_Cangtian7hCommentedhuh, odd. for some reason, a voice belonging to a very punchable ponce just quietly mumbled the words "my father will hear of this" in the back of my mind. how weird.
Draco's face reddened with a mix of anger and embarrassment. He glanced at the Slytherin Head of House sitting at the head table before taking stock of the other students sitting around him, noticing the many eyes he had attracted, before muttering something under his breath, turning back to his plate.- Li_Cangtian1dCommented
There have been a few times like this where someone asks a question that was already answered. Kakashi literally just said "Hey look, it's Might Guy and his dad Might Duy." You don't need to have the Mc question if those two people training are Guy and Duy because, again, Kakashi literally just told the Mc that that was indeed them.
Kaizen's eyes widened. He recognized them from the readings in his previous life. "Is that... Might Guy and his father?" - Li_Cangtian2dCommented
If I had only one piece of advice to give, it would be this: We, as readers, don't need immaculate descriptions of things like his dinner. In fact, I feel such complex descriptions for ordinary things only take away from your story. if it takes me 20ish seconds to read through what he had for dinner, that's 20ish seconds of me losing focus on the story. as someone who reads before sleeping, that 20 seconds is enough for someone sufficiently tired to fall asleep. Do with my opinion as you will author. I'm not trying to insult you or your writing as you write really well. Just try to focus your writing on things that actually matter to the story.
Kaizen moved on to the sushi, the rice perfectly seasoned with vinegar and the fish so fresh it practically melted in his mouth. The greens were crisp and slightly bitter, balancing the meal with their earthy flavor. - Li_Cangtian3dReplied to Li_Cangtian
it's also completed on webnovel. Just search the title and go read it from someone who actually credits the original author and doesn't shamelessly change the title and calls it their own work.
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Stolen work. Harry crow is the original title. it's completed on Fanfiction.net. author will delete this review because they are a coward and thief who does not credit the original author. you should be ashamed.
This book has been deleted. - Li_Cangtian3dCommented
so... they told Ron and Harry anyway? after saying they would not tell them about it?
"Celestial river?" Ron asked, peering over their shoulders during a break from his chess match with Harry. "Like, a magic water slide?" - Li_Cangtian5dCommented
don't forget about the literal skeletons under his floors. so many skeletons...
And let me say, the man was smart, but at the same time a little snobbish, arrogant, and quite the womanizer.7 - Li_Cangtian25dCommented
For some reason, I hear the song "someday I'll get it" when reading this...
But, a mother is a mother, whether she be yours or someone else's, they can sense when you are sad. Ragnar suddenly felt a hand on his small shoulder. He slightly looked back, holding back his tears. And he saw Grace's calm and smiling face, silently encouraging him not to cry. - Li_Cangtian29dCommented
you may want to remove the section of this chapter that you repeated.
This paragraph has been deleted. - Li_Cangtian1mthReplied to James650
that have literal lake water on the other side.
Ethan quickly opened his window, letting the smoke and steam out as his sweating intensified. Ethan looked down at his palm, which had been burnt, and grabbed his wand with his left hand as he used whatever was left of his magic to ease his pain. - Li_Cangtian1mthCommented
or the flying wind sail from Treasure Planet. that thing was and is still the coolest flying tech I have ever seen.
Nah, I'm good. I like flying and plan on figuring out wandless flight like Voldy, but the sport just doesn't do it for me. And why is it just brooms? You know what, I'm going to make a shield like Captain America's and put charms on it so I can fly like the Silver Surfer and static shock. Or maybe enchant a sword to fly around like a cultivation novel young master. - Li_Cangtian1mthCommented
was always a fan of flying longboards. Smaller than a surfboard, but longer than a skateboard. kind of like the new skimmers from D2, but more magic instead of tech. you could also have the Mc start developing magi-tech...or hex-tech(?) if you wanted to keep a more techy theme.
Nah, I'm good. I like flying and plan on figuring out wandless flight like Voldy, but the sport just doesn't do it for me. And why is it just brooms? You know what, I'm going to make a shield like Captain America's and put charms on it so I can fly like the Silver Surfer and static shock. Or maybe enchant a sword to fly around like a cultivation novel young master. - Li_Cangtian1mthCommented
they are in the dungeons and under the lake, though... would they have windows?
Ethan quickly opened his window, letting the smoke and steam out as his sweating intensified. Ethan looked down at his palm, which had been burnt, and grabbed his wand with his left hand as he used whatever was left of his magic to ease his pain. - Li_Cangtian1mthCommented
in the trio, willpower typically comes from the mind, "A disciplined mind breeds a disciplined will, Yada Yada..." and emotions are described as coming from the spirit or soul...? something felt on a deeper level than just mind, or something. I'm just trying to get some clarification because I thought soul and spirit were interchangeable terms for the same thing. This is not meant to be a dig at the author in any way, I am just dumb.
Willpower was a very important component of magic, and could even be said to be at its core, but before the age of 11 it was very hard to manipulate magic through sheer willpower because of its nature. Ethan remembered reading that will was born from the spirit, while emotions were born from the soul. One was grounded, while the other was fleeting, explaining why it was easier to perform a certain kind of magic at different ages. - Li_Cangtian1mthCommented
so, in this case, is the spirit a different part of the soul, or vise-verse? I've heard of the mind-body-spirit trio before, but not soul and spirit, which I originally thought meant the same thing...
Willpower was a very important component of magic, and could even be said to be at its core, but before the age of 11 it was very hard to manipulate magic through sheer willpower because of its nature. Ethan remembered reading that will was born from the spirit, while emotions were born from the soul. One was grounded, while the other was fleeting, explaining why it was easier to perform a certain kind of magic at different ages. - Li_Cangtian1mthCommented
unspeakably horrendous? all-consumingly dreadful? immutably archaic? Does anyone have anything else to describe something that's indescribably bad? asking for a friend.
He had started out as early as within his mother's belly, and got the 'luck' to experience his own birth. That was a terrifying experience he did not want to think of ever again, it wasn't just painful, it was… indescribably dreadful. - Li_Cangtian1mthCommented
...do you mean to say that some chose reincarnation? Since I don't remember the Mc actually choose to reincarnate...
Do you guys want the reactions of people in heaven? Those who didn't choose reincarnation, I mean. - Li_Cangtian2mthCommented
"super rare gold grade comprehension to all languages..." or something g like that back in chapter 2...
[Host has purchased: Subordinate Comprehension to all languages for 30,000 MSP] - Li_Cangtian2mthCommented
he got the ability to read, write, and speak in all languages already, right? so this is literally a waste of points...
[Host has purchased: Subordinate Comprehension to all languages for 30,000 MSP] - Li_Cangtian2mthCommented
Danzo.
[A/N: Still find it weird that both Jinchurikis were treated differently with one of them being a former Hokage's son but lemme stop my rant.]