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Eternal_Federation20hReplied to Eternal_Federation- Eternal_Federation22hPosted
5/5 This novel is peak, and I would know peak. MC is alright, it's only been 13 chapters, he has room to develop. The plot is progressing smoothly and the flow is nice. The pacing is a little fast at first but calms down later on to a sublime level. The magic system is a classic Author Novel type magic system, though I like the addition of (xyz mana/s) as a way of showing constant mana usage. I like what little romance there is so far (not ever really any romance at this moment.) would be a [6/5 if we got the female teacher into the harem ngl.] [Extra note: Having both Alicia and Northern Witch in the harem would be a power move and amazing.]
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Not like Northern Witch can create actual life, no?
Silence was the only response I got. I had hurt her even though she was more than just a golem to me; she was a friend, a guide, and the only person in this world I could confide in. - Eternal_Federation22hCommented
is she really human-like or just a golem? Will there be a humanizing Alicia arc? Could be cool.
Silence was the only response I got. I had hurt her even though she was more than just a golem to me; she was a friend, a guide, and the only person in this world I could confide in. - Eternal_Federation22hCommented
bro turned into a fax machine
'Damn it, I'm such an idiot,' I thought. - Eternal_Federation22hCommented
Fumbled.
I flinched, clenching my jaw. "Look, it's not like I wanted any of this to happen. And what would you know about being cold? You're just a golem. You don't have a heart." The words left my mouth before I could filter them. - Eternal_Federation2dCommented
a reference?
I started running. Each lap felt like an eternity as I gasped for air. Halfway through I felt like I couldn't run anymore, but I didn't want to restart the exercise. I picked up the pace and by the time I finished the 10th lap, I collapsed to the ground, completely spent. - Eternal_Federation2dCommented
Would be nice if you put amounts here like you did with mana.
- Strength: F - Eternal_Federation2dCommented
holy, one start already.
[You have successfully acquired a new skill: Dagger Affinity Lv. 1 (★ )] - Eternal_Federation2dCommented
might wanna remove one of the "structure"s.
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I hope we see what x amount of mana can do so we have context.
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2/3 times increase in a single sitting. His cultivation speed is high.
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I feel like she is paying special attention to him for some reason.
Seraphina moved behind me and put a hand on each of my shoulders. - Eternal_Federation2dCommented
GRAVITY!!!!
Still, I mumbled a halfhearted thanks. As I looked back at the bowl, I noticed something strange. There seemed to be tiny dents forming in the powder, as if something had pressed against it. - Eternal_Federation2dCommented
I hope there isn't the classic teacher who acts very close to MC and clearly they have something going on for her to not end up in the harem. It's a classic trope in "Author's POV" type novels. Not that there are any romantic vibes yet or anything. Just for future reference.
The dean's eyes scanned the room, and her eyes seemed to lock onto mine for a brief moment—I was probably just imagining things. - Eternal_Federation2dCommented
That name is quite "fishy".
Beside the set of clothes, I found an enveloped addressed in an elegant script to "Caspian Grey". - Eternal_Federation1mthReplied to Tenzing_Choeying_5139Ch 76 Atop The Island