don't mind the other rude reviewer. you are learning so it's always good to understand . and I agree hopping pov around is bad. stick to 1 and only swap when necessary. otherwise the story has good premise and all the best for your story . as you write you will get better . everyone has to start somewhere. cheers and have fun writing .

so good. thanks for the chapter

I don't get why you need to show every fight happening. like 2 chapters per fight is just stupidly and artificially prolonging the story. mc zoro luffy samji fights sure can take long and that's fine. but no one wants to see vivi nami and all fight for 2 chapters man. it's just so damn boring

very good and interesting story with fast updates.

for every 1 line of story there 900 lines of typical Chinese mc self jerk off.

the story would be good it it actually had length to it right now the chapters get over before they start. I won't say for sure this is ai generated stuff but this is close as it gets . the least you could do is copy paste 2 responses together to double the length

this doesn't have chapters just a link to his patreon shit lmao. Well played author well played indeed