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jacx_149116dCommentedwhy? keep it in 3rd person ,a narrator is not needed to refer to himself
In addition, her tall stature made the mounds on her chest particularly conspicuous. Her officer uniform also gave her beauty a heroic spirit; however, I'm afraid you cannot describe her temperament with the same words.- jacx_14911mthCommented
worst brother ever!
"...Yes," I confirmed, giving him a warm and gentle smile. - jacx_14912mthReplied to jacx_1491
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understand man, there is no almost harem it's if it is harem or no harem, if for eg there is harem tag now and people who like it read your story and pay for it,but then with the way you develop those characters and their emotions,it end up not being harem , then what? won't people who paid for it be furious and feel betrayed ?if the girl they wanted and liked despite having very close relationship with the mc does not end up in haem then?what will you do then?so pls don't play with "almost" harem. be clear from the start if ur is going to harem or not!
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then why use he?? just say your body
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dude who screamed?? and why was a random boy pulling her away?
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wdym by turning the blade backward???
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what does the last sentence even mean?
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him?? you meant amelin or Edward??
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would be better if there was a sentence before this saying that amelin came in, then this would make more sense.also grammer in this novel is barely understandable, so pls work on that.
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I am asking if that will be possible in the future.
The same could be said about the dignified Aurora as her eyes had been unable to move away from Zach ever since he began cooking. Of course, her tail was just as excited as Luna's as well. - jacx_14912mthCommented
he didn't get anything from Amelia except stats?
Zach was pleased with the new skills he received from his Aunt through the help of his active skill [God's Hand]. - jacx_14912mthCommented
will there be action? like big fights
"And it seems you have a strong affinity with healing magic." Amelia said. - jacx_14912mthCommentedCh 1 24. Let Him Cook.
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kk
Recently, she had been growing very thin, and this was because she had been eating only once a day for the past two weeks. Tonight would have ended up being the same once again, but Zach was determined to make a change. - jacx_14912mthReplied to Megabyte
there is such a thing as future right?
The same could be said about the dignified Aurora as her eyes had been unable to move away from Zach ever since he began cooking. Of course, her tail was just as excited as Luna's as well.