I really enjoyed reading first 10 chapters. Your characters were engaging and their interactions were fun and very amusing. Then you had Ginny try to set up Persephone with someone else, which really didn’t make a whole lot of sense to me and only served to add unnecessary drama. I personally feel that friends and family would have provided plenty of opportunities for dramatic hyjinks if you needed drama. Light-hearted drama is preferable to hurtful drama. I really hope you manage to fix what you broke. I added votes to encourage you to keep writing. Good luck!

So what race are her parents since they don’t seem to be human. And what is she?

This chapter was reminiscent of my beginner practice sheets like “Twinkle Twinkle Little Star and Variations”. You know, the small exercises that must be repeated over and over to build your basic foundation on any instrument? Thanks for the nostalgia.

It is good that you are going to start Alex on games since that is his passion. However, I have never heard of Kratos God of War so I can’t say whether that is a good choice or not. Good luck though.

This chapter was great! I’m really glad you made these changes to the original movie. The only thing you might want to be aware of is your use of “sons” when you should use “siblings” or “children”. I look forwards to the next update.

I realise that other spirit chefs don’t use their food spirits for cooking competitions, but you have never described the appearance of his competitors’ spirits. Also how do the chefs pick which spirit to give the star stones to? Also, why has nobody mentioned how unusual it is for Dan Bao to be around all the time?

What a VIP treatment! Things that can bring benefits to your own family must be done. How realistic.

🤣🤣🤣 He was mistaken for a pervert!

Will Benjamin or Vivaldi tutor the young Amelie in her musical journey or just be a distant inspiration and spiritual support?

The inclusion of the dream was wonderfully done. I hope more memories make their way into future chapters because it is the small moments that make the biggest impacts in both personality and world views.

A lovely new chapter and so quickly on the heels of my previous review. The only critique I have is that although the music pieces he plays contain the timeless and evocative quality you seek, they are, in the end, not his original masterpieces. I realise that it is probably easier as a writer to only refer to well-known works with copies that can be searched for online, but I hope that you can include descriptions of changes Benjamin made to the original versions by infusing his own interpretations in regards to his personal experiences that occurred in his home world.

Although the MC is going to try and remake Totoro, I hope he adds some changes and originality to it. For example, instead of a pair of sisters, make it an older brother and younger sister mirroring him and his sister. I feel it might make the story more relatable and show where his “inspiration” came from.

Yes, but then he would be stuck listening to the demon shouting at him nonstop. I figured he would find that too troublesome.

I absolutely love the pacing of your story. It feels like a whimsical summer breeze with small enthusiastic splashes from a playful brook. I hope you retain this style as the chapters unfold. Thank you for sharing your art. I am out of votes today, but I will send tomorrow’s votes your way.

It’s always the fine print that catches you. T.T

I thought Dan Bao made a sound closer to dudululu?

Keeping his priorities straight! 👍

I know, right? I’m just reading this for the fast passes, but there should still be a bottom limit to the stories WebNovel chooses to advertise.

“….don’t seem to align with [this theme] either.”

As a universal inn, does he even know what species his guests will be? He should build in the direction of his customers.