Thank you for the kind words! Means a lot!

Hey there! I think that this story has potential to be very good. The personalities of the characters are strong, and you can understand the type of people they are. However, I felt that this was a little difficult to follow. I had a similar problem before. After an experienced writer pointed it out to me, I started planning and fleshing out my scenes more. I think it would be good if you plan the scene first, so that you can decide what exactly to put in there. It would be good if you revised the chapter. Great work so far! Cheers!

This was an amazing read. As a fellow writer, it is safe to say that I can learn a lot from this book. The descriptions of light, the features of your characters, and the fight choreography- all of them were very well depicted. Worldbuilding is lacking but subtle hints are being dropped, so I think more will be revealed as time passes, although I would have loved to know about the starting village a little more (and the village after that). The story also felt a little too fast at certain times, so it was little difficult to understand the events that led up to a particular scene. I would highly recommend this book to everyone! Great work so far!

Great ideas but I feel that the pace of the story is on the faster side.

great touch

Yet again, a strong chapter.

A staff pierced through his skull? What a beast!

Feels like I just watched the first episode of an anime. Great chapter.

Would he be of any help in such a state though :)

intriguing

Hey there, this is Zaccharus! This is my first-ever web novel, so I tried my best to make it as easy-to-read and interesting as I could. I hope that you will come to like this story as much as I do. Details get revealed slowly, so as you progress further into the story, you will learn more about the world and its mystifying history along with Arwin. Arwin may face some difficult situations ahead, so hoping that you will be there to support him along his journey! Thanks for your time and support! Please do not hesitate to leave your thoughts about each chapter in the chapter comments. If you liked the story, then please share it with your friends. Cheers!

First of all - hats off to your consistency and hard work. The fact that you released so many chapters prove your commitment to your story, which really inspires me a lot. While I was reading your story, I could feel the passion and care that you put into it. The demonic style of the main character while fighting was amazing to read. The plot progression is great, and the scenes are all well thought out. I personally feel that you could describe things in a better manner. For instance, while describing the main character's body, instead of him saying that he had six-pack abs, you could have used a narrator to convey the same, because it just felt weird for a person to say, 'I have muscles in the right place'. Just my opinion. All in all, this was a wonderful read and it excites me in more ways than one :). I feel that this story will work very well in an animated medium, so I hope that it gets an animation too. Keep up the great work! Cheers!

High octane

Voices in the head never fails to give me the creeps.

You are too kind! Thanks for such a positive review! It means a lot to me! I'll probably revise a few parts to make it more engrossing and to enhance the writing, but I'm really glad you liked it, my friend! All the best in your writing journey!

I'll probably re-write a few parts of the chapters and make it more detailed :) Thank you so much for sharing what you felt! It helps me out a lot!

Thank you for your kind words!

It is a really interesting story! You have managed to write some very interesting characters. The plot progression is great, and the idea is amazing as well! The biggest problem I found with the story was the sentence structure and the grammar issues, which can be resolved using software like Grammarly. Besides that, I think that this is an amazing read! Looking forward to more! Great work author!

old man ftw

I think the action of handing him the bread should not be a part of the dialogue.