Maxbonzo
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Maxbonzo1mthReplied to ManseyCh 5 Chapter V: Class President- Maxbonzo2mthReplied to PizzaStopsTime
oh my bad, pretty sure the translations I read called her a he early on.
Number 13 proceeded to explain his quirk to the class and how it can save or kill people. The entire class listened intently all the way through, and when he was finished Aizawa walked over to the railing and pointed down, "All Right, first things first"- his attention was diverted to behind him where he saw a black fog come out of nowhere. And out of it came a man covered head to toe in hands. - Maxbonzo4mthReplied to Balling
always bet on Kirishima
"Nah, I'd win." - Maxbonzo4mthReplied to _Spectator_
In regards to AFO, I mean you could apply this to anything really. Like why did he give up after fIling to get Aizawas quirk one time? Could have tried again, but if he does then there's no story cause he just wins before chapter 1. I mean yeah I could have him just kill everyone's family and everyone in UA when they're home but like, why? AFO isnt Shigaraki anyway he cares more about control than chaos and can get to Sasuke a hundred different ways. Just because something makes sense in theory doesnt mean it would be the most enjoyable thing for people to read. The second quirk plot will be slow burn, but its still happening. And for his darkness, I mean I didnt wanna copy the same character development he goes through in Naruto, but he'll always be vengeful. I could potentially incorperate that scaring students from being heroes plot its kind of interesting, but only for like 1 or 2 students not the whole class. For feeling like a aide character I mean bro... It hasnt even been 20 chapters give it time man lol, by this point in the main story Midoriya only inherited OFA, fought stain, and helped save All Might at USJ. I've had Sasuke boost Midoriya, help at USJ, and help force high level villains into hiding, messing with thier drug rings. Thanks for the input overall, if you have anything else to say I'll be happy to read and reply.
Ch 19 Chapter XIX: I'm Sorry - Maxbonzo6mthReplied to Balling
- Maxbonzo6mthReplied to Balling
Thank you for the review. for Sasuke being edgy I mean... it's Sasuke Uchiha bro, that's his character. He will tone down some eventually though.you're right that I should probably try to integrate some other characters though, suggestions on how are always welcome. It's just that most characters are just irrelevant and don't serve much of any purpose to the overall plot of the story, so I was mostly including the relevant ones. I don't many people want to or care about me giving time to shine for guys like Sero and stuff
- Maxbonzo6mthReplied to Balling
well it's his whole motivation people know about
He gritted his teeth, "Shut it! Stop talking like you have any idea what this feels like! All of you people wanna keep telling me how I should handle my trauma when none of you have experienced anything close to the pain I have! Both of my parents were killed! I saw their lifeless bodies and felt their cold hands... Every last person involved in their deaths has signed away their right to live! They're going to die by my hands, and nothing you or anyone else says will stop me from making that ambition a reality!" - Maxbonzo6mthReplied to Balling
I've never read other mha stories that did this, sorry. I was just trying to avoid plot holes. although yeah I could have made this portion more entertaining looking back. another reason I did it was to show that Sasukes quirk isn't purely physical due to how he could kinda break out. thank you for the criticism though it helps me be better
Sasuke turned to see the shaggy purple-haired boy who declared war on their class a couple of weeks ago. He narrowed his eyes, "No, go"— - Maxbonzo6mthReplied to Balling
It's a split second decision she has no experience in. All that was on her mind was that he's about to jump out there and get himself killed which she wanted to prevent. She probably didn't think it would knock him out but either way he can easily be carried
Purple energy coiled around his legs, but his legs were swept from under him and he hit his head, knocking him out. Ashido had a tense face and gritted teeth, "We aren't on that level, idiot!" - Maxbonzo6mthReplied to Lord_RingsCh 14 Chapter XIV: Musutafu Arc
- Maxbonzo7mthReplied to LuciusAgares
Agreed, honestly Kota could be like Shino from Naruto
Nezu pointed at one of the names, "We'll just kick out Rikido Satou then, it's not like he'll contribute anything to the story besides winning a bedroom contest or something anyways." - Maxbonzo7mthReplied to CORINTHIANS1910
Come on now the vibrant flashbacks transitions are cooooool. He's pretty normal besides using r9k
The window he was pressed up against turned into a door he was looking through the crack of, and he shrunk in size. His father was rubbing the back of his head with a tense face, "What does he want this time?" - Maxbonzo7mthReplied to CORINTHIANS1910
Broooo lol it's a flashback😭
She turned towards him and put a finger under her mouth and looked up for a moment, "Hmm… Well, it comes naturally so it's hard to put into words. If I had to describe it, it's like channeling the energy all throughout my body and increasing the output on one part of my body to use it as I please," She smiled and ruffled his hair, "With your quirk, I doubt you'll ever have to do anything like that though." - Maxbonzo7mthReplied to Zack_shinigami
Uh huh no. He might get one in the future but no sword right now. Do you think a sword would be a good idea?
The gear Sasuke got wasn't anything special compared to what some others were wearing. It was like a traditional Japanese outfit. (imagine his Shippuden outfit). - Maxbonzo7mthReplied to Zack_shinigami
Kota will serve a purpose in this story. and while Sugar guy is stronger I just don't think he's ever been as relevant to the story.
Nezu pointed at one of the names, "We'll just kick out Rikido Satou then, it's not like he'll contribute anything to the story besides winning a bedroom contest or something anyways." - Maxbonzo7mthReplied to Sasuke_Uchiha_0404Ch 4 Chapter IV: Sasuke Vs Mina
- Maxbonzo7mthReplied to Wail_Meskine
Nah he really is lol. When you think about it he has actually done stuff, like USJ with Midoriya and Asui
Nezu pointed at one of the names, "We'll just kick out Rikido Satou then, it's not like he'll contribute anything to the story besides winning a bedroom contest or something anyways."