Spwn07
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Spwn071yrPostedYour writing is well-structured, and the dialogue between characters flows smoothly. The descriptions of the environment and the characters' actions and expressions are clear and concise, making it easy for readers to visualize the scene. There are no significant grammar or spelling errors that could distract from the story. Overall, it is a well-written piece of dialogue and storytelling. Good job!
- Spwn071yrCommentedCh 2 The Vendetta
- Spwn071yrCommented
teleportation is OP, i could go to school 1 minute before the class start
With a sudden surge of energy, the thief activated his power, causing the world around them to blur. In an instant, he disappeared, leaving Riona momentarily stunned. - Spwn071yrCommented
so, she have the power of Fire and Liquid Mimicry?
With a swift motion, the flames dissipated, leaving behind a glistening liquid-like substance on her palm. It shimmered and rippled like molten silver, flowing and reforming at her command. Aria marveled at the liquid mimicry, recognizing the precision and finesse required. - Spwn071yrCommented
ofc guild is a must in a fantasy genre
The bustling sounds of the guild greeted Riona and her group as they stepped inside, the scent of ale and sweat mixing in the air. They attracted more than a few curious glances, but Riona ignored them as she approached the counter, a bloody head in her grasp. - Spwn071yrCommentedCh 1 The Falling Star
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ah yes, ofc its the mc awakening her power
A wave of anger and determination surged within me, and I felt a warmth spreading throughout my body. It was as if a flame was being lit inside my chest, and its heat and power grew with every passing moment. - Spwn071yrCommented
Bro passed out 💀
I tried to sit up, but a wave of dizziness washed over me, and I fell back onto my pillow. I felt as if all my energy had been drained out of my body.