Ryodante
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Jake " Blaze " Spike.
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Hideo responded with a curt nod, the rigid discipline of his upbringing dictating his poise. "Mrs. Jude," his voice rumbled, the gravelly syllables forming in Japanese and appearing in English on the holographic slate.- Ryodante7mthCommented
Change some words here ( Like tablet ? )
The Butler's eyes flicked between Isabelle and William, then back to the tablet in his hands. "I must emphasize again, the experiences you're about to undergo are powerful and intense. They will feel real because, in many ways, they are." He paused, a slight shift in his demeanor making the atmosphere in the room more heavy. - Ryodante7mthCommented
Redundancy with Chapter 1, Fix this ( Delete most likely )
The butler led them to a private booth, their table bathed in the warm light of the atmospheric lamps. A glass tablet was placed in front of them, each digital page filled with a plethora of experiences, the specifics hidden behind cryptic names and brief descriptions. Titles like 'The Skydive', 'Death Game', 'Urban Legend' flickered across the screen, each accompanied by an estimated preparation time ranging from minutes to weeks. - Ryodante7mthCommented
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An affable holographic butler greeted them, its luminous form bowed slightly in welcome. "Good evening, Mr. and Mrs. Davis. It's a pleasure to have you with us tonight. Let me guide you through our offer."