For a small town of 3120 people, a new family coming is considered new even after 2 years.

So the keys, are physical. This means people can take then from him, but there’s a twist any supernatural being must have his explicit permission to take the keys from him. As in he must say: [name] take this key from my hand. Just like in the netflix series, the semons cannot take the keys without the keys being given to them. But since they’re physical this means he can make some.

Greatly appreciated, I’ll reread the story and see where all went wrong, from your perspective. As I write I sometimes get lost in what I have established and what I haven’t. Thanks again your insight was pretty useful.

Yes I already have an extra key in mind to solve that.

Thanks for your insight, For the fear thing I went in with the concept that Jasper would end up finding him out, as from a small scare to completely terror he would start suspecting that Mc knows something he shouldn’t. As for the harness they are usually made pretty large and I wanted something that he can equip under his casual clothes like supermans suit. If you have any suggestions I’m open to change that. Maybe change the tight fit to “tight but comfortable”. As for the ghost door, I said it would be the gate to the spirit world but with other keys that I have in mind not yet discovered by the protagonist, he will eventually be able to change its location.

Probably the locke as the key needs to have the same shape as the lock. But in the case of the omega key both at once, as they were built to hold the demons from crossing.

Yeah his cocky self is like dark spiderman.

What can I improve? If you could point out the decision that made you feel that way please. As I’m trying to learn.

Isn’t the omega key only use to open the black door? You mean alpha key, the one that banihes the demon and soul from someone’s body. As for the matchstick key if you watch the neftlix series I think first episode, we see a man planting the matchstick key into himself before exploding into flames, so to my knowledge matchstick key one shots vampires if he manages to touch them with it. As it is said to even be able to burn a river, so capable of burbing the unburnable.

Edward in midnight sun, as Bella blood sings to him. “It would be slower and more difficult, trying to take them all down when they were panicked and scrambling, moving in chaos. Not impossible, but there would be much more noise. Time for lots of screaming. Someone would hear... and I'd be forced to kill more innocents in this black hour.” Rosalie suggesting killing Bella, "The girl hit her head today. So maybe that injury turns out to be more serious than it looked," Rosalie said, volunteering to kill Bella herself to protect the coven. "Every mortal goes to sleep with the chance of never waking up."

That’s the thing I know twilight, have you read midnight sun? We see twilight through the eyes of Edward, if he hadn’t opposed Jasper Bella’s story would have ended in the first book. The Cullen have moved more than once do to the death of a human, they of course don’t like killing but if it’s to protect the little peace of mind they have they wouldn’t hesitate. Carlisle is probably the only saint in all of their family. As for Jasper that man is ruthless, his body count is probably in the thousands, so adding another kill to his list to make Alice happy is not a problem for him at all.

Do you guys know what joggers are? It’s a pretty common thing to do, especially in school environment where you’re trying stay comfortable but still fashionable. Like this for example, except a lakers jersey and some different jays.

How would you want me to proceed instead? Just curious if it’s a good idea I can implement it.

You’re right thanks for noticing the plot hole, I’ll fix it. Let me know if you notice anything else.

Doesn’t make sense, but people after becoming close friends will simply call him Teo. Mateo is more of a mexican name that’s why I went with that Mathew Rodriguez doesn’t flow as well on the tongue.

Where do you get that?

Oh thanks didn’t notice.

Think of punk Hazard awakening of logia is to turn environment permanently into the desired type. So his awakening could turn a winter island into a desert one. And we all know how OP crocodile is in a desert environment as everything around him could kill you.