I forgor 💀

I’m glad that you’ve decided to go straight to the meat of things since we’ve still yet to see the MC’s “full”(or more) power. But either way, keep cooking.

While I’m all for a good wish fulfillment, there comes a point where you have to get the story moving. I get that the main character is WEAK at the moment and his summons are restricted to their own respective strengths with no chance for growth, you have to get the chapters moving. At least 1000 words long with actual content beyond “choose from these three options.” I do not have enough content or story/plot to give this story a rating. While the voting aspect is cool, getting a solid foundation before asking for votes is important. Good luck with the story.

While I do like that something’s happening in these chapters, I feel that the pacing might be too slow. Not enough is happening. Not saying that the story is bad, I’m just saying that it feels as if it’s stagnant. It’s supposed to be a kingdom building-esque story. But there’s barely any kingdom building or relationship with Nero. I get it, you can cook. But maybe turn up the heat a little more yeah? I see promise in this story. That’s why I’m saying all this. Thanks for the chapter.

Soup.

Keep going. Keep the world building going and you’ll see that you have a solid foundation! Dont forget the small details with Kingdom building.

He likes The Climb.

It’s like hair. Pretty hard to stretch out but easy to cut.

Hey, the ocean is vast and there must be other characters that can be used. If not, the author can come up with others. Don’t make the Protagonist beg Glenn for help. Let the protagonist have some backbone.

Some of them have fruit powers that are problematic. Therefore in order to not run the risk of having the fruit pop up again then they just imprison the people in this forgotten floor and let them live out their lives.

Unbelievable, just how much power does Adam have?

How am I supposed to tell emotion when he has a mask on his face?(sarcasm)

It’s just sad at this point.

The grind and the climb never end.

It was painful to read this back and forth. But finally the MC will move forward. Nothing will stop the man who has a wife and child to return to. Yao never stood a chance.

Smart man that one. Only doing his job and nothing more.

You can’t have peace unless you have the biggest guns. Otherwise nobody is gonna treat you right.

Jake still got that dawg in ’im