Fairly intriguing story, pacing could be better and so could it's grammar, but it has potential. Also, I recommend not typing out the summary in all capital letters.

Shameless author review here: I'm super happy to see everyone showing their support and enjoying the story so far. I would like to take some time to remind everyone to review and leave comments throughout the story as it really helps keep the motivation up. With that being said, enjoy the story.

While the writing quality and pacing leaves a lot to be desired, the story definitely has potential. Work on your grammar and prose a little more, author, and your story will blossom.

It's a very interesting story to say the least, with an enrapturing premise. The writing and grammar could be better, but all in all it's a solid read and I'm looking forward to reading more.

The story itself is quite solid across the board. Decent prose and writing ability from the author, and generally just a solid read all around.

Admittedly, it's not the type of story you immediately expect anything out of. So it came as a surprise when I found myself almost instantly addicted to it. It takes many of the tropes of its kind and turns them into a compelling story that makes you want more.

Admittedly, the story isn't immediately appealing. However, should the reader choose to continue on, it picks up extremely quickly and proves it's ultimate value. All in all, a worth-it read, good job author.

While I haven't had a chance to read all that much of it, the story is instantly very alluring and the synopsis is an immediate hook that draws the reader in. The prose is also extremely creative and fresh and on top of that, the concept itself is fairly original as well. All that being said, I look forward to reading more!

Definitely an interesting must-read, pacing is a little rough at first but it ultimately pays off and gets really addicting really quickly. Would highly recommend that you give this story the attention it deserves!