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VelRiose

VelRiose

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2023-03-12 JoinedIndia
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  • VelRiose
    VelRiose2mth
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    Hey! buddy! first confirm what's the rank of protagonists talent? Somewhere in the lines it was -B while in last chapter it was -F, choose one at least.

    Ch 8 The Final Round
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    Celestial Bloodline
    Fantasy · _Orange_
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  • VelRiose
    VelRiose3mth
    Commented

    What's with all that repetition? Gone sleepy.....

    Ch 104 Chapter104-The Shock of Victory
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    Talent Awakening: I, the Weakest Awakened, Start with Dragonfire Spell
    Fantasy · Red_Skin_Duck
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  • VelRiose
    VelRiose3mth
    Commented

    what's with 'First person to jump into third person perspective. Either use first person phrases or write in third person view. Making difficult to read you know.

    Ch 8 The Crack is expanding!
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    Born in apocalypse
    Fantasy · COSMIC04
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  • VelRiose
    VelRiose4mth
    Commented

    Writing same thing again and again, haven't you seen before uploading chapters that, what you mistakes you have done it. Waste of time. Instead of phrasing same words, sentences even para, why don't you write on plot. Seriously good story but...

    Ch 65 Unexpected Encounter[2]
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    Manaless Mage
    Fantasy · Gladstone_
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  • VelRiose
    VelRiose4mth
    Commented

    Writer, try to read by yourself before uploading. This and some previous chapters were messed up.

    Ch 77 Chapter 58: Authority of the Secret Land! Sky Net Will! Intelligent Machinery Ascension!【4k Subscriptions Needed!】_2
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    Deities: Starting From Goblins
    Games · Gray Ashes
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  • VelRiose
    VelRiose4mth
    Commented

    Please try to read before you upload cuz although story is interesting but grammatical errors are a lot, well it ruined all the mood.

    Ch 23 Muscle Paralysis
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    Global Awakening: I created the system
    Fantasy · Ghost_Worker
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  • VelRiose
    VelRiose6mth
    Commented

    Add more conversations and flow of continuous story instead of writing same old thing again n again. that's ruined all the mood, intersting plots. I like this story but your describing of same old things in every chapters ruining all fun.

    Ch 62 Why wouldn't a big brother dare to?
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    Ancestor Above
    Eastern · Er Muqi
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  • VelRiose
    VelRiose6mth
    Commented

    Adding same words, sentences, situation again and again makes story turn boring, please consider.

    Ch 12 Water Ghost Lake
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    Ancestor Above
    Eastern · Er Muqi
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  • VelRiose
    VelRiose6mth
    Commented

    How come only Yulan is Yu xian's Dual Companion and not Chen Yi or that butterfly girl? what's the trick here, Mr.?

    Ch 13 Chapter 13: Chen Yi's Ambition
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    My Cultivation Companion Helps Me Achieve Immortality
    Eastern · The Dumb melon Isn't Sweet
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  • VelRiose
    VelRiose1yr
    Commented

    Man! You have a lot "Reasons", whenever a beautiful scenario appears and ruined the mood[img=disgusted]

    Ch 28 Should I Eat Her Now?
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    Binding System
    Fantasy · Shooting_Star
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