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Killian_truegames10mthCommentedTo be honest I wasn’t going to say anything, but the whole mission thing did annoy me. I’ve never liked the whole ROB thing and when they interfere with the world it makes things much worse. In my opinion the best partof self inserts are seeing how a characters interactions with a world change it, having some being telling someone to do something makes it all feel a lot more artificial. Not to mention it is a plot device in the worst way; ie a plot device that isn’t trying to hide the fact that it is a plot device. It is literally god stepping down and telling the character do so something. Overall I’d prefer it to be changed and for you to come up with a reason for smoker to go after Blackbeard. Maybe the government knew about some bad deed he did that whitebeard thought was just the standerd world government slander. Now that he is no longer protected by whitebeard and breaking into impel down he seeks him out to kill Jim for the good of the world.
Ch 87 Notice- Killian_truegames10mthCommentedCh 50 Stud
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- Killian_truegames1yrCommented
I was really hoping he’d continue to be blind or at least be forced to find a solution on his own. I would have even settled for moody’s eye. This is just a lazy waist of a promising plot point. Don’t tease your reader with something actually interesting if your not willing to commit to it.
Ch 6 Ch. 6 Accident at St. Mungo's - Killian_truegames1yrPosted
I gave you a four because I feel bad dunking on your story after only reading 3 chapters. Unfortunately getting a legendary or mythical as a starter is a non-starter for me. What is the point of going on an adventure if you have a Pokémon that is anywhere even close to the realm of a god as a starter? And if is not a god and you make the Pokémon weak what is the point of making it a mythical? It just confuses my why a writer would start a story like that. It limits the storytelling potential so much and makes it hard to justify giving any sort of struggle to your charactor. It delves into the realm of power fantisy, which is only really gratifying to read if it takes work to get.
- Killian_truegames1yrCommented
Please don’t replace you with u
Varissa: "By the way whenever you trade-in monster crystals the valis is sent directly to your adventurers' license.This way u don't have to always carry the coins around. You can use it at any of the shops to trade. Have a good day." - Killian_truegames1yrCommented
Buggy trained
Buggy train his body, his knife skills, and of course his devil fruit. He try to explore his devil fruit's ability by trying many things. Now he know that he can split himself into a very thin layer like a paper. However, he still can't split himself into too many parts because the more he split, the more concentration he need. - Killian_truegames1yrCommented
When the time has come
Buggy forget about that and continue his training. He'll think about it when the time have come. For now, he need to train and be strong, so he'll be able to protect himself & his crew. - Killian_truegames1yrCommented
That has the luck
"I'm not Luffy that have the luck to get a free ship after saving a village, so i'll need to buy one, which is very expensive. Sigh, this thinking about money really hurt my head."-Buggy - Killian_truegames1yrCommented
He wants to save it
Buggy have a lot of money now after Roger divided their wealth among the crew. He know he can spend it, but Buggy want to save it first. If he want to make a crew, he will need money to buy a ship, which is not cheap at all, so he'll save up money as much as he can.