this is legit ass the characters are so stiff and basically dead. all dialogue is awful it feels like it was written by children who can’t understand characters. then we the system which is the stupidest idea to put into a story like this. honestly nothing good was in this the characters are ass the whole world building is god awful and the story is trash.

i really dislike how short every chapter is and on top of that in the beginning he definitely knew the plot and story and characters but you’ve retconned it so he knows nothing or he became stupid. it kind of kills the story and the short chapters kills the pacing tbh

the concept is cool and it has interesting ideas but god damn the english is so awful. in the same paragraph you will be misspelling names and calling female servants and saying they’re guys which could he looked over if the chapters weren’t so short. on top of all that i think the overall story telling at least so far(the first fight with gilgamesh just ended) hasn’t been very good and kind of scatter brained. overall this isn’t worth the read at this stage, maybe if this got edited and sort of polished it would but so far not worth it.

i think that binding vow is to only say what your technique is and how it works and stuff like that and not screaming the name out

i would say keep it different because i feel like the magic systems are way too different to be mixed together. i would say if you want it in dxd make it another school or magic rather than blend them together

i would say make it like the magical side in the anime where in the final season they tried to take his arm off him to use its power, this could lead to having him using the power like in the final fight of the anime. seriously watch that fight again it’s really cool

i think gods in dxd logic are alive because of belief so you can’t really kill them forever but i would say make IB weaken them maybe not all the way down to human power level with only one touch maybe make it take a few and grim reapers make them get bodied

so this might be too OP how you implement it but i think a final weapon that would be cool to have as a summon would be the Black Barrel from the nasuverse. it’s ability is to measure the life(?) of an object and shoot out the same amount of energy to kill it so like our earth has a lifespan of billions of years so the barrel would shoot out the same energy to destroy the earth. now in the fgo game it takes time to acquire a target then to get a read on the lifespan and even to shoot it needs a demi-servant with a command spell so it’s pretty much a final shot and you get it only once.

it’s not the mountain so it’s sandor

i like the idea of devils being spiritual/supernatural bodies because god created angels from his power and lucifer created devils with his power so fallen angels are also spiritual beings. however i would also say any half species will be physical beings, also i think yokai are just animals becoming special so i think yokai will be physcial beings. but i also don’t like the idea of him becoming one punch man and deleting beings out of existence so maybe make it like getting hit hurts their souls and weakens them and it depends on their strength how weak they become. also you could make this like jjk where there’s conditions to delete supernatural out of the world so like the average devil, angels, fallen angels will take 2-3 hits to be deleted and scale it up.

he better not die and become a devil. i swear that’s the lamest plot line in every DxD story

i really love that idea of if a devil is physical or supernatural bodies even if it’s an OP one hit kill it’s balanced with it being attached to a normal human. i really hope he doesn’t just randomly become one punch man. also have you read the manga and light novel so you can know the power with in imagine breaker

this makes sense i mean religion especially old time religion only has two options. death or saying it’s the divine intervening in mortal matters.

i hope his arc is trying to find freedom because in this feudal system he will always be chained down no matter how big his dragon is or how high he can fly. he will always be chained down due to his families. it could be intresting

you know from the books a king cutting themselves with the throne historically has shown that the king won’t be king for long

i kind of hope those two meet up because it would be nice and it might lead to some more interesting fight scenes and funny moments

some of you guys hyped this shit up way too much the first chapter is alright and kind of cool but every chapter afterwards is ass. this dude just accepts staying in the camp and then just agrees with everything and goes along with everything. to make it worse this idiot of an author just puts it to a vote for who his father is in the MIDDLE OF THE STORY like dude wtf this isn’t like asking what his favorite food is this is some serious backstory and then after that point his powers change and he never uses his shikigami and only uses the wheel of adaption. like dude he has the divine dogs the bird the elephant the ox the snake all of which can be strong af but he only uses one of them. then in the beginning you think he’s more of a shinto demigod but no he’s like a second cousin or something stupid. then there’s the grammatical errors like his name changing every fucking paragraph and for some reason whole paragraphs are missing when he gets new weapons or learns something this author doesn’t even write anything. this story got way too hyped up and at best this story is a 2 as of now because evrything so far has been below mediocre.

man is this author a retard or something because this one idiot can’t write a single chapter without any mistakes

man this was lame AF he was the one being arrogant, like you can’t be acting that in a KINGS court and infront of a king. this isn’t 2024 and you’re meeting braindead joe biden you’re meeting a not yet mad king which the MC could’ve made him not mad. this just seems like another “north rebels and insta wins free and easy” i like the north in GoT but the MC definitely wasn’t doing anything right or proper that could’ve led to a constructive relationship. major L story

the biggest problem with this “wEaK t0 StrOnG” story is that most(99.9999%) authors just have them weak and then the “train” for 2 days and become strong or even worse they “train” off screen for 2 months and then we just see them come back and then they’re instantly strong. i mean this to be constructive so you don’t do these dumb things because every weak to strong story goes down that route of making the MC weak af and stupid but then they train for a week and instantly they’re the strongest because of it.