MangaDino49
I’m new to this ‘creating a story’ stuff. Suggestions appreciated!
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MangaDino495mthCommentedHmm? Oh… There's no more cookies… Noooooo…- MangaDino495mthCommented
I thought it was 1.8 Meters long, which is not nearly a meter long.
An ordinary bass was about 20 centimeters long, while this bass was nearly a meter long. The difference in body length was huge. - MangaDino495mthReplied to Artem_Trey
Compared to a normal bass, it definitely is.
When he arrived, a 1.8-meter-long giant beast emerged from the water bit by bit. Its aura was awe-inspiring and ferocious. - MangaDino495mthCommented
It still says 6, not 7
He opened his attribute panel and saw that his vitality had increased from 6 points to 7 points! - MangaDino495mthCommented
Arguably, a giant fish that can almost instantly kill anything in a ten meter radius isn’t good for the enviorment.
"Alright, guess I'll be carrying out a good deed today! Protecting the ecological environment is everyone's responsibility!" - MangaDino496mthCommented"What are you waiting for? Use the Molotov Cocktail to break through the blockade of the bone shards and kill that Necromancer!"
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Scorge*
In this dungeon, there are only so few people that could do something like that and it definitely wasn´t Segmund the tyrant bastard, and the floor guardian, Scarge the demon eating Scarecrow, wouldn´t appear here just unannounced. - MangaDino496mthCommented"Should we investigate it?" asked Sahra.
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Race Ideas: Angling Soul Stealer, Angling Soul Sucker, Young Angling Soul Stealer, and Young Angling Soul Sucker.
What do you think about this new character? I will maybe change Derats name and race if there are good suggestions. Anyway, Raas will finally start to level up and gain more muscles on his bones. - MangaDino496mthCommented
It would be better if we didn’t know this for story purposes.
"Hmpf, a lot has changed! I had to adapt, ever since my home was... raided." - MangaDino496mthCommented'Since when could fish fly'
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Good, no more drama like that last chapter, that was a lot, considering there was no drama before.
"Oh my, an Acutra. Hm, Raas is still Raas," said Sahra before grinning at him. - MangaDino496mthCommented
If it’s an intelligent monster, it might want you to be more powerful to get more EXP.
'Maybe it got interested in my status and protected me during my evolution? But why?' - MangaDino496mthCommented
There’s no superstition, but there is the author’s foreshadowing.
'Wait, did I just jinx myself?! Pah, as if I believe in superstition!' - MangaDino496mthReplied to Justsomedude2021
No, more like how human-y they act. A real snake wouldn’t have done that.
"I guess you really are an Acutra..." mumbled the wise old man while stroking his majestic beard. - MangaDino496mthReplied to SmilingReader99
The snake left because he heard the humans coming, and he’s to small to swallow the Nagirus whole.
The archer chimed in, "What´s weirder is that the body isn´t eaten or munched on. Even the monster core is still there." - MangaDino496mthCommented
And (then) the shadows moves.
"Keep an eye out, will you?" he whispered, and the shadows moved. - MangaDino496mthCommented
Lead eater
"Good work, prepare some assassins and kill that beast when the damned leave eater leaves." - MangaDino496mthCommented
Access*
He waited for her to leave the hall before focusing back on me. "Don't be so tense Serpent Guardian Raas. I only came here to excess you with my own eyes, and from what I see I am impressed. And I didn't come empty-handed. " - MangaDino496mthCommented
I think that you need to add more commas, besides that, BEST WORK EVER!!!
Anyway, criticism, improvements, and ideas are always welcomed here :)