Author spends too much time waxing poetry rather than progressing the story and it gets obnoxious. Especially when topics are rehashed in the next chapter or so, just with a slightly different blend of poetry. This isn’t inherently obnoxious, but it drags on to the point of obscene. Normally I would just move on but every other aspect of the fic shows great promise.

Well done. Sad to see it go. The iron born campaign could have been further explored, and what happened to the land beyond the wall after the long night. but it’s not that big of a deal. Sad to see it go but I dislike it more when a fanfic drags on for no reason. Thanks again!

Look it up. Women experienceing sexual arousal during sexual assault is a common, natural, response. Victims often struggle with shame and guilt as a result of that as well. This combined with the fact that MC I’d clearly on the spectrum of nymphomania and the breeding system stuff is recipe for this kind of response. I for one am interested to see how these subjects are explored in this book!

The idea a kid had to pay for meds that allowed him to function threw me for a loop. This John must be American.