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CeIestial_Ancestor1yrCommentedCh 12 Healing- CeIestial_Ancestor1yrCommented(A/N: In case it's not clear, this is no longer virtual, and the game has become reality, though the players have no way of knowing that. Since there'll probably be confusion, I'll just say it: all non-players have been exterminated, the game (by that I mean my heavily, heavily altered version) has become reality (the players can't be sure of that fact), and the world itself is heavily altered. Hope that clears up any confusion.)
- CeIestial_Ancestor1yrCommentedLuo Ming was barely able to catch his breath as the other boys caught up to him. "Brother Tian, you caught the rat?" one of them said, patting Tian on the back. "It's only natural that a hunter can herd their prey, after all."
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Writing has improved a lot, hope you keep it going this time.
I wandered through the streets, taking in the sights and sounds of the town. The architecture was distinctly Japanese, with red-tiled roofs and stone lanterns lining the streets. The town was bustling with activity, as people went about their business and chatted with each other. I felt a pang of curiosity and wanted to learn more about this place, but I quickly shook it off. I didn't want to draw attention to myself, and I didn't want to make any Japanese friends. I was here to survive, and that was all that mattered. - CeIestial_Ancestor1yrCommentedCh 8 Mirroring Swordsmen
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- CeIestial_Ancestor1yrCommentedCh 1 Preamble
- CeIestial_Ancestor1yrCommentedCh 3 Re-Evaluation
- CeIestial_Ancestor1yrPosted
Writing Quality: 5/5. No writing issues at all, from start to finish the story is spotless clean. Stability of Updates: 5/5. The author posts multiple chapters a week, with long chapters. which is amazing given the quality of him/her work. Character Design: 5/5. The main character is different then what I have seen before, the MC is toxic, bully and smart, benefit oriented always thinking about what he can get from the situation ahead of him and again smart thank god for that the MC can think, and uses his brain which most MCs are not gifted with these days, if this alone cant grant it 5 stars then I don't know what will. World Background: 5/5. Its mix of SAO and original idea's of the author, which cant be really rated yet because of the low number of chapters. going to give him/her the benefit of the doubt because the worldbuilding is very good so far. Story development: 5/5. The interaction between characters along the story are nice and natural, with most of the speech making the reader imagine and believe these characters are alive without a friction of awkwardness and robotic talk, nothing seemed to be forced yet and everything flows naturally with some tumbles here and there, but nothing big to bring down the story that much. No cringe at all yet and hope does not come anytime soon. But what I don't like about the story this is sometimes the MC seems too special like he is some god chosen person and everybody got to notice him but it never showed that much or made the story any less entertaining. The story is super immersive for any readers as you will not get interrupted at all mid reading by some author notes. but like I said the number of chapters is still too little to really provide that amazing of an analyses on it so until next time when a bigger number of chapters is provided.