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Bruno_oliveira4mthReplied to Darkness_EnjoyerThe real criticism isn't even much about the characters, after all they are from a game that was inspired by a novel. The fact that the description is very overwhelming makes it almost impossible to read, I'm currently in the part where he leaves school for the first dungeon, if I'm not mistaken I'm going to the 4th chapter for him to actually enter the dungeon, the description of the black market, totally overwhelming , the constant focus on wanting to demonstrate that the MC is an observer, goes far beyond making the story complicated to read. Until now I wonder if it deserved almost an entire chapter just to show the MC walking around in the black market.
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I thought I was being boring while reading, but when I saw many comments I realized that most people think that way. 1st The author, to increase the chapter, gets lost a lot in useless things, using his Observation skill as an excuse, he even mentions sweat. 2nd The author loses himself in making characters alive, no matter what world you are in, even the weakest and slowest ones, will have a group, I know that the previous owner of the body avoided this so he isolated himself, but the fact that basically everyone including the teachers, who so far in chapter 30 has not been shown any reason for this to be the case, why would a teacher, an old person with life experience, waste his time trying to belittle a student, what a weak characterization. 3rd Seriously, author, 30 chapters to tell just 3 effective days of history, and in those 3 days nothing happened, which deserves the focus on the story... 4th In 30 chapters he does not mention any fact that gives him a reason to keep a low profile, on the contrary, from what was mentioned when the characters from the main cast talked, if he shows progress he would get a better and more reserved place to train, As quoted by the Protagonist of the original story, within 30 days you will already have the availability to train in better and separate rooms.
- Bruno_oliveira8mthReplied to TymSpiritwolf
The duel involves many more things for Jon, such as testing himself, training, and in his case, gaining prominence
With a challenging look, Nolan, now losing patience and composure, suggested, "How about we settle this in the arena? A duel, right here, right now. Let's see if you're truly worthy of standing by Elara's side." - Bruno_oliveira8mthReplied to Pedro_Sousa
and because it is a sword
- **Intelligence:** +2 - Bruno_oliveira8mthReplied to Akuma_Ma0uCh 28 Bonds of Resilience: A Shinobi's Journey
- Bruno_oliveira8mthReplied to TymSpiritwolf
True... My Bad
"Have you been waiting long? Hey, Jon... Earth to Jon." Elara couldn't help but be amused by Jon's reaction upon seeing her, but all she showed was a triumphant smile. - Bruno_oliveira8mthReplied to TymSpiritwolf
Maybe he just denied the obvious? Sometimes we do this for comfort
As the sun began to set, Gwen bid Jon farewell as if it were one of their usual goodbyes. However, Jon felt that something was different. Before walking away, Gwen hugged and kissed him one more time. The kiss was slow, laden with deep emotions and feelings. After that day, Jon felt genuinely happy, aware that his relationship with Gwen had transcended mere friendship, even though he was usually slow to pick up on such emotional nuances. However, Gwen never returned to Riverwood... - Bruno_oliveira8mthReplied to AlfDeT_ValedstormCh 30 30 - First Day of Class.
- Bruno_oliveira8mthReplied to AGcuevaxCh 1 A nostalgic old game.
- Bruno_oliveira8mthReplied to AlfDeT_Valedstorm
"It's just that I do everything in Portuguese and then I have to use ChatGPT to translate it into English. And since I'm terrible at English, it's difficult. Please let me know if you notice something like that <3."
This paragraph has been deleted. - Bruno_oliveira8mthReplied to Anonymoose_DumCh 44 44 - Truth revealed, mere acquaintances.
- Bruno_oliveira8mthReplied to undesignatedCh 44 44 - Truth revealed, mere acquaintances.
- Bruno_oliveira8mthReplied to Khun_Aug3r0_Agnis
For me the sequence was good, besides I have a cap with +18 coming up I hope you don't laugh too much at my failed attempt to transcribe something, so... Keep reading I'm doing my best
"Jon Woodmoon..." Roderic began, extending his hand for a handshake. "It was quite a surprise for me, while enjoying a moment with my FIANCEE." He emphasized the word 'fiancee,' as if wanting to etch each syllable into Jon. "Then, I saw someone I've long wanted to apologize to for a terrible mistake I made in the past." Feigning remorse, Roderic looked at Jon with a melancholic expression and concluded, "Could you forgive me for what I did in Riverwood?" - Bruno_oliveira8mthReplied to undesignatedCh 42 42 - Settling the Score with a Date!
- Bruno_oliveira8mthReplied to DollarCh 42 42 - Settling the Score with a Date!
- Bruno_oliveira8mthReplied to TyphonWyllt
nice [img=recommend][img=recommend]
Initially, he dismissed the idea, thinking this Jon was just a competent aspiring mage. But now, hearing about Jon's remarkable performance in the entrance exam, a new unease settled in his mind. He needed to confirm if it was the same Jon and, if so, ensure that he never got close to Gwen again. - Bruno_oliveira8mthReplied to Caveman21
yes, yes, yes, ..... 😍😍
The game itself was a monumental disappointment. The narrative culminated abruptly and disappointingly. At the peak of their strength, the player faced enemies that fell like flies, and the ultimate antagonist was nothing more than a mere whisper in the face of accumulated power. However, for Jon, this was the perfect ludic universe. The inherent freedom of the game attracted a fervent community of modders, who reinvented and expanded that world every day. - Bruno_oliveira8mthReplied to Sonu_SirajCh 3 3- Unveiling Mysteries: Aeloria's Enchanted Realms and Uncharted Paths
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