Five chapters in and I am loving it. The story progression so far is easy to follow, leaving enough room for imagination. It is a beautiful read and is promising. Keep up the updates

Zero hesitation

wow, no tea no nothing.

getting mad defensive

Uhuh, very convincing.

Choice of words says otherwise

noice

this means alot, thanks.

i enjoyed the perspective switch, the writing style is simple and easy to follow, the story progression feels slow and doesn't have any skips that ruin the reading the experience. worth a read.

what weird stuff???

the switch from narrator to character voice is a nice twist

starts off nice, long chapter tho i feel like. interesting how the mc termoil is explained in first person .

this one i enjoyed writing

I have no problem with the phrase, just the his bit... expected she voiced warningly.

and done, thanks

Done

Glad you liked it

He's trying to cheer himself up, so it's pale

Thank you, I appreciate the stars.

Thoroughly enjoyed this. The writing style is immersive, the description are just the right amount, author took realistic and turned it into words. It is obvious what the story is about but how it is conveyed adds a mystery to it that it doesn't even feel generic. All fives because despite the long aah chapters, I read all of them and was bummed there isn't more. Of course a few phrasings, missing words and punctuation's break the immersion, but they are too few and far between that it is barely noticeable.