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KC_writing1yrPostedThe pacing is pretty fast paced, so it was a little hard to keep up in the beginning. I wish I was just a bit slower so we could connect with the character some more. I am curious to see where the story goes, though. :)
This book has been deleted.- KC_writing1yrCommentedCh 2 Prologue : The Opportunity (R-18)
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Well, this took a dark turn.
I move away from her and gaze at her unconscious face with her tongue lolling out, nothing of the previous elegance and coldness was to be found. - KC_writing1yrCommented
Is tatsuya a boy or a girl? You use both pronouns with her and him.
"Now what would Tatsuya think of her mother when I send him this video" - KC_writing1yrCommented
You go, Natsumi.
"Try to touch me again and I'll break your hand", she said without any emotion in her voice - KC_writing1yrCommented
Love the name Blackburn
The duke's eldest daughter gave me a lecture about 'how I am ruining the Blackburn name' and 'how it was a mistake for me to be born'. - KC_writing1yrPosted
The beginning is a bit slow, but the writing style is good. I found myself getting confused around the second chapter when it jumps into the point of view of the princess. Your character design was good and the world you're creating is pretty intruging. Curious to see where it's going to go from here.
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I'm getting female Aladdin vibes.
The monkey followed her quietly through the trees and finally perched back on her shoulders. - KC_writing1yrCommented
Monkey companion, let's go!
The monkey shyly nodded sidewards. - KC_writing1yrCommented
Well, that's unfortunate.
Goodbye, escape pod. He closed his eyes again. His head was starting to feel tight and he felt like throwing up. No, worse than that. He felt like his organs would come off. - KC_writing1yrCommented
RUDE! They're scared, man.
He was in utter shock when he heard that. How is he going to explain that to this herd of goats down there? - KC_writing1yrCommented
Very true. Panicking will get you in deeper.
Deril was a very calm man. He knew how to handle any situation calmly and that's how they mostly tried to calm people down. Panic is never the right answer in a serious situation. - KC_writing1yrReplied to daylightmoon123445
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Thanks for pointing this out. I'll have to make note of that in a later chapter when she's talking on her past. :)
The memories hadn't come all at once. Rather, they began appearing in her dreams around the time she'd turned five, six years before the first man came to her room. Her mother had told her it was just an over creative mind and laughed it off. - KC_writing1yrReplied to
That's when she started having memories of her previous life, not when they started selling her body.
The memories hadn't come all at once. Rather, they began appearing in her dreams around the time she'd turned five, six years before the first man came to her room. Her mother had told her it was just an over creative mind and laughed it off. - KC_writing1yrReplied to RealRomanLord
She was around 12/13 years old when they sold her body. 5 years old when she started having memories about her previous life.
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