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DiesWrites

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Hi! I'm Dies. I really like web/light novels, which is why I decided to write my own and would like if you could help me improve my writing!

2022-10-10 JoinedGlobal
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  • DiesWrites
    DiesWrites8mth
    Replied to Mubarek_Jibril

    Tbh, I made this novel with the idea that "things would just happen" and our protagonist wouldn't be able to do anything about that.

    「Skill 'Battle Sense Lv.1' cannot be assimilated due to the possession of a similar skill」
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    Into the Labyrith: I will Survive by Evolving in Another World.
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  • DiesWrites
    DiesWrites9mth
    Replied to Mubarek_Jibril

    Couldn't. That's too high level for our protagonist.

    「Skill 'Battle Sense Lv.1' cannot be assimilated due to the possession of a similar skill」
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    Into the Labyrith: I will Survive by Evolving in Another World.
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  • DiesWrites
    DiesWrites11mth
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    Overall, the story is good and some parts can be fixed, but it's definitely a hidden gem, just a bit unpolished. The writing sometimes makes several words capitalized for some reason, which is odd, but other than that, nothing else really stuck out. For now, I recommend the dear author to reflect the emotions of the characters first to make their attributes shine and differentiate them from anybody else. Sometimes, you can even just brute force it and straight up just tell us what the characters are feeling and how they deal with this emotion, good or bad. Overall, it's pretty good, but can be even better.

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    The Feather of Twilight
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  • DiesWrites
    DiesWrites11mth
    Replied to ItzNeedless

    Not for a while, sorry. Have to get through a couple more volumes before.

    Ch 1 King's Oblivion
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    The King's Failed Return
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  • DiesWrites
    DiesWrites1yr
    Commented

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    Ch 359 Sun, Feb 5, 2023
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    Games · Mika_Me
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    DiesWrites1yr
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    Ch 358 Sat, Feb 4, 2023
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    DiesWrites1yr
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    Ch 357 Fri, Feb 3, 2023
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    DiesWrites1yr
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  • DiesWrites
    DiesWrites1yr
    Commented

    Really solid writing, the mood and tone has been laid out nicely. I like the slow start, solidifying the importance of the MC in his previous life before introducing the next. I think that's really well done. Amazing job with all that. It was a great read.

    Ch 3 Terror in Hospital Night (3/3)
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    New King Of Eternal Lands
    Fantasy · Kita8944
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  • DiesWrites
    DiesWrites1yr
    Commented

    Wait, this guy was still here?

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    New King Of Eternal Lands
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  • DiesWrites
    DiesWrites1yr
    Commented

    Hey, I just dm-ed you. It's a little nitpicky, but I find it hard to imagine a nurse scared by blood. Sure, they'll be startled or horrified, especially by the amount, that much is for certain. But I don't think they'll be THAT put off by it, y'know? They work with blood on surgeries, after all. Again, I'm being nitpicky here. Still, though, the way you stretch tension is AMAZING. It really solidifies the feeling of dread and the heavy atmosphere, not to mention the way you enhanced this by the description of the setting from the first scene. Great job!❤

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    New King Of Eternal Lands
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  • DiesWrites
    DiesWrites1yr
    Replied to Ignoble_Immortal

    Sadly, no. I actually forgot that they were still in the water when I wrote this.

    I held her hand tighter. Her scarred hand was rough, yet soft. It felt so strong and yet so weak. I continued to gaze at her, my eyes refusing to look anywhere lese but her eyes.
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    Into the Labyrith: I will Survive by Evolving in Another World.
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  • DiesWrites
    DiesWrites1yr
    Replied to BooksForLifeBeyond

    It's a reincarnation story. The parts where it shifts in setting(except the prince) is the original world.😁

    Ch 27 The Beast and the Monster
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