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G009ps3dReplied to DaoistGrandFateA support AI modeled after his mother was sent along with his ship
Just then, a familiar voice rang through the pod, calming his racing heart. "Calm down, Master!" the voice advised. It was a voice he recognized all too well - the voice of his mother.- G009ps5dReplied to Psan
The pod trajectory was not being controlled by the system at this point. So, isn’t it obvious that the system would try to alert the occupant to brace for impact?
"ALERT: Passenger is advised to brace for impact!" The system continued, its voice echoing ominously in the small space of the pod. - G009ps5dReplied to Psan
??? Firstly, it’s my own writing. It’s as I imagined it. The MC didn’t see a point to respond to Hal so, after getting ignore more than once, Hal reacted by creating a construct and forcefully gather his attention. What’s wrong with that?
"You have only yourself to blame for ignoring me!" shouted Hal, his voice filled with frustration and a hint of anger. With a swift gesture, he sent the giant green fist flying towards the alien, hoping this time, he would get a reaction. - G009ps5dReplied to G009ps
Also, think about the how his mother was pulled away to deal with the ever changing situation of the war. Sage prepped him also, in a hurry.
As the alien ascended higher, stepping into the moonlight, his features became more distinct. His armor was worn-out, his clothes torn and stained with blood, evidence of a recent battle. The blood suggested that he could be injured, implying that he was a warrior who had recently been in a fierce battle. - G009ps5dReplied to Psan
Kindly read the paragraph again. The clothes were stained not that he was bleeding. He was healed during his journey.
As the alien ascended higher, stepping into the moonlight, his features became more distinct. His armor was worn-out, his clothes torn and stained with blood, evidence of a recent battle. The blood suggested that he could be injured, implying that he was a warrior who had recently been in a fierce battle. - G009ps5dReplied to Psan
Read the tags. This is a story with cultivation elements. Not a pure DB story. Depending on the relam the power levels can mean you are the boss or can mean you are still weak. Also, each transformation is broken down into levels. Like for example there is a difference between the Blue state of MC and his Mother. The start of the story is on a higher relam where the priomordial laws are strong. So a star destroye’s singularity cannon doesn’t create a normal singularity. Also, read the thoughts section. Anyway, it’s my first writing, maybe not able to portray my imagination well but, I’m enjoying the ride. Only interested in getting suggestions here for plots. Thanks for your time.
- G009ps5dReplied to PsanCh 1 Chapter 1: The Prayer -Part 1 (Updated)
- G009ps5dReplied to DaoistGrandFate
It's not. Just personal preference. Only using AI for spelling and grammar checks. Changed the writing style after Chapter 39. If you can't carry on till then, please go find another book.
The sound was so intense, so all-encompassing, that it drowned out the cacophony of the battlefield below, if only for a fleeting moment. The clamour of clashing weapons, the screams of the wounded, and the battle cries of the defiant were all momentarily silenced, replaced by the awe-inspiring, terrifying sound of interstellar power. - G009ps5dReplied to Psan
- G009ps22dReplied to Chill_House_
sure. thanks appreciate the suggestions. @g009ps is my handle.
While team beta was defending Themyscira, another Kryptonian ship made its way towards the north Atlantic ocean and not observing anything but the vast ocean began running localized scans of the area to investigate the sources of the discrepancy. - G009ps23dReplied to Chill_House_
Check chapter 54 again . While reading my versions noticed that I actually skipped a few paragraphs. Let me know your thoughts
While team beta was defending Themyscira, another Kryptonian ship made its way towards the north Atlantic ocean and not observing anything but the vast ocean began running localized scans of the area to investigate the sources of the discrepancy. - G009ps23dReplied to rbp
MC? How is he open? Till now I’ve only shown Orach give basic advice and courtesy. I mean he is living in Wayne Mansion so, some ounce of respect should be shown to Bruce and Alfred. Also, he definitely cautious since he asks the AI to clean out any bugs and has his own plans. Please let me know your thought. Love to improve.
Ch 36 Chapter 36 - The Odyssey - Part 3 - G009ps23dReplied to rbp
- G009ps24dReplied to M_OBCh 59 Chapter 59 - Unyielding General Kneels to None - Part 8