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AFluteySong

AFluteySong

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  • AFluteySong
    AFluteySong1yr
    Replied to alu_sachi

    Actually it's not the system. It's the voice of the AI controlling the suit

    (Dear Host. Suit integration at 99.99%. Memory immersion is required for the next step. Reinitialization commenced. The period is 3017. The host must experience the entire timeline to proceed.)
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  • AFluteySong
    AFluteySong1yr
    Posted

    Good book! The system is very interesting and there are a lot of descriptions everywhere. The author tries something unique which is refreshing.

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  • AFluteySong
    AFluteySong1yr
    Replied to The_Founder

    Not quite, but thank you for the comment :)

    Ch 1 Golden Age of Warriors, Magicians, and Rogues!
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  • AFluteySong
    AFluteySong1yr
    Replied to Sixpips

    Thank you very much!

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  • AFluteySong
    AFluteySong1yr
    Posted

    This reminds me of a world sect in the victorian ages. You have a story of a young boy who experiences the harsh reality of life (you don't have to outrun a bear, just your friend) and is given a second chance at life. Instead of an angel offering a deal at redemption, it's a devil instead, which means the plot will have its fair share of bumps and twists. It is definitely more similar to a slow-burn traditional novel, like the author mentions. Looking forward to seeing how it fleshes out.

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  • AFluteySong
    AFluteySong1yr
    Replied to Ice_Princesss

    Thanks! I'm glad you like it even though it's not your genre :D

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  • AFluteySong
    AFluteySong1yr
    Replied to RomanceFanatic028

    Thank you for your suggestion!

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  • AFluteySong
    AFluteySong1yr
    Posted

    I've read 4 chapters and I'm conflicted. It's excellent writing, but, I'm confused on the heavy emphasis on Lai. It seems like the man at the beginning was the mafia ceo? That doesn't detract any high marks though. I'm just wondering why the the quick intro.

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  • AFluteySong
    AFluteySong1yr
    Posted

    Honestly, this story is a rare gem! Perfect everything! The development leads you to the next major plot point just when you expect to see it. The characters seem well thought out with their own unique personalities. The mystery in the story keeps you reading. I'm adding it to my collection to read more later :D

    Red Blood Century
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  • AFluteySong
    AFluteySong1yr
    Replied to 002_Yuki_Onna

    Thanks so much!

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  • AFluteySong
    AFluteySong1yr
    Posted

    I read this earlier anonymously to provide feedback. Just adding in the review now. It shifts from buddhism to wuxia concepts, so I'm curious how the two are related. The conversation between disciple and master also feels organic. The disciple was adamant about meeting his master one last time, which was a pretty nice touch. How does it affect his mentality in the future? who knows.

    nill1234
    Fantasy · Warm_Noodle
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  • AFluteySong
    AFluteySong1yr
    Replied to SaraSaavedra

    Thank you for taking the time to read my story :D

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  • AFluteySong
    AFluteySong1yr
    Posted

    Fantastic story so far. The story development is interesting and understands what makes a compelling story. I thought it the chapter ended on a boring note, but the next chapter added some spice to the mix. It was very interesting to see what happens just around the corner. I'm not a slice-of-life person, but I can still appreciate a solid story.

    My Unborn Son
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  • AFluteySong
    AFluteySong1yr
    Posted

    I'm basing this off of the plot twist that happens. It doesn't fall into the cliche that you often see, although it starts using a good one. The story development is actually good, unexpected, and makes you look forward. The MC's background is developed well enough and I enjoy all the unique mechanics this world has to offer.

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    Fantasy · AMonarch
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  • AFluteySong
    AFluteySong1yr
    Commented

    Put this at the beginning :D!

    "Your Majesty!" the guard cried as he knocked on the door, "we have been attacked!"
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  • AFluteySong
    AFluteySong1yr
    Posted

    My review is based on the hook. If the castle can be described during the attack, that would be a lot more interesting to engage in. Basically, if the scene was reorganized so that the fight happened right away, and then the aftermath is described, that would make this a pretty interested read.

    Eden of Rothania
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  • AFluteySong
    AFluteySong1yr
    Replied to AMonarch

    Thanks for reading my novel! I'm glad you appreciate what I have to offer so far.

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  • AFluteySong
    AFluteySong1yr
    Replied to AFluteySong

    The world building in chapter 1 I mean.

    Reborn as a Pig: Kingdom
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  • AFluteySong
    AFluteySong1yr
    Posted

    Great writing. The story follows the life of a pig, and I don't know much about a pig, so I'm hoping the author shows us something amazing. The world background at the beginning was good, and as long as the story continues with that, I believe it'll be fantastic.

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  • AFluteySong
    AFluteySong1yr
    Commented

    How does a pig pick something up O.O

    Takashi walked towards the bushes, feeling a sense of hunger gnawing at his stomach. He reached out and plucked a berry from the bush, inspecting it closely. The berry was small and round, with a deep purple color. He brought it to his mouth and took a tentative bite.
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