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Charming_liar3dPosted- Charming_liar4dReplied to YellowEnn
- Charming_liar4dPosted
The story is good in itself, the pacing is okay though the descriptions could use some work, like the characters and also their environment like when Kalla was transported or transmigrated the first time. Also just an advice but for character description just write defined cheekbones, jawline and something about their eyes
- Charming_liar7mthCommented
This is how I picture him, this is his mercenary outfit.
I heard a constant annoying knock on my door, it must have been Mikael or Emile. No one else comes to talk to me, hell they can't even look me in the eye and with good reason. I got up from my bed, picked up my weapons that were leaning on the wall, I first tied my two scimitar swords to my back then my long sword around my waist before wearing my hood and mask. I didn't bother with my bow I just left it right where it was. - Charming_liar8mthReplied to Author_of_FateCh 32 Chapter thirty one:The Fair's Disruption
- Charming_liar9mthReplied to Sanzhar_AbishCh 26 Chapter twenty five: The liana festival
- Charming_liar9mthPosted
Well overall the story is good, the author switches from povs even in the beginning you can see the switch of povs. Also the one thing am sure that the author would deliver to the reader is chapter length. Reader's won't have to worry about short chapters. Also the author also shows changes in the background, like they show the exact place the event is taking place. Well I should stop there if I keep on I might spoil it.
- Charming_liar9mthCommentedCh 1 The arise of Rosa
- Charming_liar9mthPosted
The novel's amazing even though the names are causing me troubles when it comes to memorizing them but I don't mind. Unlike the majority of the books here on webnovel this is an original and it's creativity it's amazing from descriptions to development to the dialogues. It's an amazing novel leaving you wanting more
- Charming_liar10mthPosted
Well apart from some grammar mistakes and the author forgetting to edit something I commented it's a good story leaving you wanting more
This book has been deleted. - Charming_liar10mthCommented
Uhm I think the word you were looking for was tick to 11
This book has been deleted. - Charming_liar10mthReplied to _fall_
- Charming_liar10mthCommented
The first two are okay but the last one was unnecessary
The words wouldn't change. His eyes scanned through the letter in its entirety. Then, they did it again. And again. The words wouldn't change. Even when his eyes became bloodshot, when they tried to pierce through the letter as though to reach a hidden truth, the words wouldn't change. They were dead. His companions were dead. His brother was dead. - Charming_liar10mthCommented
Like here you've repeated the words ,the words wouldn't change three times
The words wouldn't change. His eyes scanned through the letter in its entirety. Then, they did it again. And again. The words wouldn't change. Even when his eyes became bloodshot, when they tried to pierce through the letter as though to reach a hidden truth, the words wouldn't change. They were dead. His companions were dead. His brother was dead. - Charming_liar10mthCommented
Come on throw your Mc a bone.
Red stained my cheeks as I suddenly realized I wore very little at all. Having been assaulted many times, I was used to waking up with torn or missing clothes, but this felt different. My dress, if you could call it that, had long since been shredded, barely preserving enough integrity to preserve my modesty. A multitude of cuts and bruises poked through the bloodstained cloth, ranging from puffy scars to cuts still oozing blood. Life had not treated this body kindly in recent months, and, having experienced many of these kinds of injuries myself, I was surprised a girl this age had even survived. - Charming_liar10mthCommentedCh 2 Aren't we all on the same side?