Yes, my point is no one abandoned him, it's not like he had friends then they left him

It's as if you're intentionally changing his personality and intentionally making him stupid and naive when he's actually a very smart person and very conscious of the way the world works.

I get that you're tryna do the OP MC thing, but you could at least make your book more realistic. How can he continuously perform magic skills like ignitia and lightning dash without running out of energy 🙄🙄 especially lightning dash it's a movement skill one that allows him to have quick explosive speed(at least that's what a dash is supposed to mean) but you let him use it continuously with running out of arch energy or running out of stamina. How's that possible it's not like he has unlimited stamina and energy also dash is supposed to be a dash skill that allows him to cover short distance quickly yet when he uses it you just let him keep running continuously how is that a dash ?

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this is the best comment do far. It's making the book boring and tiring to read while making it unnecessarily longer than it could have actually been. I don't understand why the author has to explain every single thing or action. We readers are not 2 year old kids, our brains are fully capable of painting a picture besides it's more interesting to have us try to imagine why some things happened. Basically you're making your book boring by giving too much description, it's almost as if it was a kid's story book and not a novel

The OP was a sad, pathetic loser that killed himself just because of one heartbreak and now he's suddenly become bold daring, Cunning ? someone who never had a social life knows how to manipulate people like gods who have lived for hundred of thousands of years ? common fam

But I'm hoping the story really explodes in the coming chapters🙂🙂

He's someone that doesn't make any efforts in his life yet he somehow expects something different to happen or he expects a random person to just start showing care for him suddenly ? No friends, no relationship with his colleagues, no buddies from college ( even an antisocial person would have made at least one friend in college ), no friends online (seriously ?)

You should have made it something that really counts. like if he ACTUALLY TRIED MAKING FRIENDS but no one paid him any attention or people just kept getting close to him just to take advantage of him or leech off him. something original

To be honest that was underwhelming

The MC is so pathetic I can't even find a way to feel pity for him. like why are you feeling lonely when you're the one who never tried making friends He doesn't even have friends online that shows his extreme lack of effort in socializing

nobody abandoned him. he never actually tried to develop any form of relationship with anyone.

okay this was pathetic and a stupid reason to give up on life. I get the whole point but you could have come up with something better because his situation is something he caused for himself. someone who never tried making friends is complaining about being alone and having no one who cares for him ? It's like leaving your window open and complaining that rain got into your room

And please change the way you write, you make the characters say and do too many childish things

I don't understand why you write as if the people reading the book are kids, why is he explaining himself to them. they can either believe or not all he needed to do was drop of the monster and leave Besides that ancestral version of him has a look of indifference according to you, why would someone like that waste his time explaining his actions to weaklings ?