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Thecentipede1dReplied to APOCALYPTIC_NOVELS+1
"As for the heroes you summon," the R.O.B. continued, "They are not the original individuals themselves, but rather identical copies imbued with the same skills, abilities and personalities as their counterparts."- Thecentipede3dCommentedWe will be going back to ACTUAL once-a-week uploads with this one.
- Thecentipede7dCommented"T-That fire can easily melt through the island we're standing on!" Kaen commented, lost in the beauty of the flame. It was art!
- Thecentipede7dCommentedMegumi gave a genuine smile as he fell to his knees. "Fuck you, Naohiro Zenin."
- Thecentipede9dCommentedA smile appeared on Hiruzen's face as he realized, 'It looks like I'll be safe from any ludicrous requests for a few months.'
- Thecentipede12dReplied to Desire96
kakashi definitely has way more than a jonin he could as teen naruto would have waaaaaaaaay more chakra 4x that of a jonin.... i would say just leave it be as elite jonin and kage so we can reference from just people of same group
What should be the gap between the chakra levels between Genin, Chunin, Jounin, and Elite Jounin(Yes, I am gonna say A ranks are these in this fic) and Kage level? I decided on 10 times increase for the first three, any opinions? - Thecentipede13dCommented"He's so beautiful. What shall we name him, Danzo?"
- Thecentipede13dCommented
red flag
... or I'll get Deadpool's cancer or something. - Thecentipede13dReplied to Desire96
mate I hope you have already prepared for your exams.....
Do give some constructive Criticism and Comment more. - Thecentipede13dCommented
Jujutsu kaisen
Also, which is your favourite anime if you had to choose one? - Thecentipede13dCommented
I would say try to highlight and show when the mc is learning a new skill or say creating a new Jutsu, Also try to write on paper what fighting styles you want your mc to have and then build from there giving him 10 12 main jutsu's for different things. this would make the mc's image a lot clearer in our minds.
Do give some constructive Criticism and Comment more. - Thecentipede13dCommented
great, the fights were clear and everything flowed smothly
How was the chapter? - Thecentipede14dReplied to Yok_Sana
he is asian
As I pondered on this question an image of Naruto and Sasuke fighting in the final Valley at their strongest appeared. It excited me to know that someone with the right tools could become that strong in this world. But at the same time I also remembered the dangers and threats hiding in the shadows. Both threats from inside the village and outside. - Thecentipede14dReplied to Mohd_Jamal_5484
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Fujin worked day and night for a couple of months to make the proposal good enough. I heard that he hadn't slept for days and looked very tired with giant bags under his eyes during the Council Meeting. However, he improved it so much that his proposal was accepted unanimously by the Council! That hasn't happened in years!" - Thecentipede15dCommentedCh 24 Author's doubt
- Thecentipede15dReplied to MrPidgey
mahito,jogo, etc.
Naohiro gave him a closed-eye smile. "You will be fine if it isn't a disaster-grade curse. Maki is strong." - Thecentipede16dCommented
this chapter felt so much better. I think it would be better if you switched from third person to first person frequently especially for fights and telling what is going on for the mc. It will take time but try to find your own writing style. Loved this one. Keep going
How was the chapter? - Thecentipede16dCommented
cool but hard to pull off
How did you like my idea of Mindscape development? - Thecentipede16dCommented
yup really good, they felt natural and not forced and also the distinct change in tone of dialogue was great.
Did you like the interaction between characters in this chapter? - Thecentipede16dCommented
noice
"Everyone who survived is here already," He said with a neutral tone