no offense this story does seems a bit rushed and some readers may not like this it seems as if a young 13 or 14 year wrote this story maybe you should take your time with this story other people just might say this story sucks and some may like but the story is kinda cringey there is no romance or descriptive feeling when a mature scene takes place even other stories with hookups or drink scenes has more details just practice and practice more on your writing and also if you're a child leave the mature scenes to the grown ups