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What a drama queen
But before Julia could say anything else, she suddenly slapped Julia's hand away. "It's okay," she said, forcing a grin. "I forgot that you don't consider me anything more than a roommate." - Suzu_Rim1yrCommented
Isn't her name was Zara?
It was a relief to find someone who understood what she had gone through. Alisha sank onto Ashley's bed, her body trembling with the weight of her emotions. The paper Sara had given her lay forgotten in her hand, Harry's face staring back at her from its surface. The mere sight of him was enough to send her heart racing and her thoughts spiraling out of control. - Suzu_Rim1yrCommented
It's better to use "Chloe my subordinate" or "my boss - Chloe -" assigned me everything
"That was awkward, right?" Alisha said forcefully laughing. "But I really didn't lie about what happened at work. I swear, Chloe who i was assigned as assistant of assigned me everything." She sighed before continuing. "I don't know why she is lying now..." - Suzu_Rim1yrCommented
Blame everything on *her*
Ashley had her hands folded and was shaking her head, looking down. Alisha couldn't tell if Ashley was angry or frustrated or both. Ashley turned around and muttered "fucking morons" under her breath before walking back to her room. Alisha was taken aback by Ashley's reaction, but she couldn't blame her. Ashley had always been a bit of a skeptic and didn't trust easily, and the way Rayyan and his assistant blamed everything on me was enough to piss her off. - Suzu_Rim1yrCommented
This paragraph is not flawless enough. Idk why but just didn't looks right to me
Alisha was still reeling from the trauma she had gone through at her first day job. She was confused and didn't know what to think or feel. As Rayyan and his assistant left, Alisha looked around at her roommates. Julia and Maria were looking at her with supportive smiles, which helped to calm her nerves a bit, she was feeling better to have at least someone who still believes her but she was also a bit unsure if they really do trust her or not. But when she looked at Ashley, she saw a different expression on her face. - Suzu_Rim1yrCommented
This is in present tense
Alisha could hardly believe what she was hearing. She had gone from being accused of lying to being given a second chance. Rayyan continued "Take your time, let us know your decision, that said both of them walked out of the apartment leaving roommates alone wondering. Alisha was stunned and didnt knew what is just happening with her. She never thought that they will do this with her, - Suzu_Rim1yrCommented
Split this paragraph
Maria looked concerned, "This way, she will get sick." Ashley groaned in agreement, "Well, you can't blame her, can you?" Julia mixed her pasta with a spoon and tied her hair into a bun with a pencil. She took a precised bite and said, "We should give her some space to mourn." - Suzu_Rim1yrCommented
Poor him :(
And so, he made a solemn vow to himself on her funeral: he would never let this happen to anyone else. He would use his voice and his strength to fight against the injustices of the world, and to make sure that the powerful were held accountable for their actions. In his heart, he knew that his mother would be proud of him, and that her spirit would live on through him and his actions. - Suzu_Rim1yrCommented
'I' should be in capital
After a few minutes, his mother replied, "I don't know, it's urgent. We have some important matters to discuss i guess." - Suzu_Rim1yrCommented
You need to split this paragraph
Alisha replied with a trembling voice, "I am not the type of woman you think I am." But Alex just chuckled, slowly opening his shirt buttons and untying his tie. "I know what type of woman you are," he said with a sly smile on his face.