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Altansarnai5mthCommentedCh 1 Haven't seen her in two years- Altansarnai5mthCommentedCh 1 Haven't seen her in two years
- Altansarnai7mthPosted
I can tell it's a great work just from the synopsis. I have loved the others book of the author. Can't wait for this one. Would recommend this to everyone. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
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- Altansarnai8mthReplied to DixerquaCh 7 Went To Gamble Again
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"Because your so called Jiju, if you mean Kabir by any chance like a girl name Natasha so unless Natasha is your sister then he isn't your jiju." - Altansarnai8mthReplied to Dixerqua
Let's pray togetherđ¤đ¤đ¤
"I think since you are going to meet Jiju then you need to think about him instead of worrying about me." Before I could register her words she closed the door behind me. - Altansarnai8mthReplied to Dixerqua
Gotcha
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or maybe not...
And I don't think that idiot is ever going to understand my hints, even though he knows me the best. - Altansarnai9mthPosted
It is a nice story. You wrote it very beautifully considering this is hour first book. I felt it was a little too fast paced. Even though I have no problem in that I think it would be better if they took things slow. Also please stick to one writing style. The one which you have used in later chapters it make you feel that you are reading a script rather than a story. it doesn't set well.I will be looking forward to your work.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
- Altansarnai9mthCommented
and you can't see its her friend
Henry: (irritated) What is wrong with you, Alice? Pay attention! - Altansarnai9mthCommented
yesss
Henry: (calm) Then, perhaps it's best not to say or do things that would make you feel embarrassed. - Altansarnai9mthCommented
now it looks like a script of a play rather than a novel. just writing the situation in bracked after a colon. It would be much better if it were likeChris couldn't help but be curious about Dhalia's decision of asking Henry. "Why did you asked her Dhalia?" He asked with curiosity. Idk if it is ok...
Dhalia: (hesitant) Well, I thought he might have some valuable insights about this town. You know how I love to study, and I thought it would be a great opportunity to gather information for our project. - Altansarnai9mthCommented
Yeah..You approach a person whom you just met 2 days ago and try to unbutton his shirt and get close to him without his permission and when he reject you, you are hurt.
Alice: voice trembling, tears streaming down her face "Dhalia, I don't understand... I approached Henry, thinking it would be playful, but he rejected me... It was so embarrassing and hurtful." - Altansarnai9mthCommented
Do classmates do that? like just go and try to unbutton the shirt of another person. Let's say that grace used to do that and she was the kind of person who would throw herself at others. but what about Alice?
Alice sat on the bed next to him. Her hand reached out, ready to unbutton Henry's shirt and reveal what was hidden beneath. However, the silence was interrupted by Henry's sudden action. He firmly grabbed her hand, showing his impatience. With a clear and firm voice, - Altansarnai9mthCommented
Umm... I am still not clear about their project
"I'm a good painter," Jack exclaimed, his voice brimming with confidence. "I think we can win!"