How could she not accept him? She would be to curious to leave him be after she saw him having better chakra control herself

Should be like ancient builder, steve is in no way a regular human

Your doing good, keep up the work.

I feel like that’s a huge percentage for being quirkless even though it was stated that it was very rare it should be more like .2%

You got this!!!! Keep up the good work and interesting concepts you bring.

Shouldn’t this be King Stark? Since the north is a recognized kingdom with the Starks being the royal family, and since the father and first son died should Ned be king now?

This novel is coming along ver nicely, and the grammar isn’ to bad. Only a few errors here and there but not enough to affect the overall quality of the novel. So keep it up author!

I would go with the second option since this is your story now and should make some minor changes. Last chapter had him be transported when he was coming back from a war campaign unlike last time which had him transported and like a castle or something so it would make sense that he would have more soldiers with him this time.

This is a good novel, but why is the main character acting like a petty child. Isn’t he like 35 or something in the mind?

You are doing great. Keep up the great work. You only have those exams once while this book can be written at any time. Also what are you exams on?

U got to admit it was pretty funny tho

How many chapters are gonna be on this world? I never played this game so I have no interest in the interaction and story line. I have been just skimming through the chapters waiting for Harry to go back to his own world or a different one. Plus is there a list of worlds he will go to? It would help to know which ones I would actually read. This is not criticizing ur work. This is a really good novel and want to see more, but for the worlds that I have absolutely no knowledge on I will skip.

This guy can indeed suck a lemon. Being an author is hard, especially when ur a student. If u haven’t even tried being an author than u shouldn’ criticize someone else.

I admit that I was one of them. I have read to many Harry Potter fan books that had Harry become a master swordsman. Harry was the master of death in this fan fic right? Or was it another one? Anyways if he was he should’ve been immortal and anyone who is immortal is bound to try everything to escape the bored mess of time.

Since the MC was already killing a bunch of people, he should’ve also killed Newt Scamandar (prob spelt it wrong,but deal with it) and take his mega trunk

Another world that Harry should go to would be the 7 deadly sins world. There are a lot of people and I would like to know what the full counter would do to Harry

Huh. The final chapter of this book, like the last chapter of the novel? Cause I thought this was a really good book and expected to see a lot more

Harry shouldn’ some point go to the Rick and Morty universe. Idk how you would make it work, but I think the interactions between the characters would be pretty fun to read about

This is definitely a top notch GoT fan fic. Only problem I have right now is that Harry is “bad” with the sword which dosnt make sense since he did have the sword of Gryffindor