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Obsidians_smoke7mthCommentedCh 23 Lacerate- Obsidians_smoke9mthCommentedCh 40 Chapter Schedule For Seven Days
- Obsidians_smoke9mthCommentedCh 58 Chapter 49 : Holding A Green Gas
- Obsidians_smoke9mthCommentedCh 51 51. Pandoran War, Aerial Battle
- Obsidians_smoke9mthCommentedCh 50 50. Meeting in the flesh
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🇧🇷 This chapter seems shorter than the previous one. And where is the confrontation? Shouldn't that be the title of the chapter? Where is the fight? Where is the blood? Where is the confrontation? No offense, but all that time not writing has left you rusty, author. The chapter's sparse word count, shallow conversations, superficial descriptions, and numerous grammatical errors left much to be desired in this chapter. Don't be in a hurry to post the story. Just take your time to improve everything you can until you're happy with what you have. No one likes a rushed story. 🇧🇷
Ch 28 Chapter 25: Confrontation - Obsidians_smoke9mthCommentedCh 27 Chapter 24: little story
- Obsidians_smoke9mthCommentedCh 46 46. The beginning
- Obsidians_smoke10mthCommentedCh 9 Hell Hound or Owl Demon?
- Obsidians_smoke10mthCommentedCh 83 Chapter 83: Drip Acquired
- Obsidians_smoke10mthCommentedCh 20 Chapter 20
- Obsidians_smoke11mthCommentedCh 32 Chapter 29: Qiv Brellen
- Obsidians_smoke11mthCommentedCh 31 Chapter 28: Apprentices
- Obsidians_smoke11mthCommentedCh 30 Chapter 27 : What The Hell...
- Obsidians_smoke1yrCommentedCh 60 Protagonist
- Obsidians_smoke1yrCommentedCh 59 Saving Protagonist 2
- Obsidians_smoke1yrReplied to Winter_slayer
🇧🇷 I agree with my friend's opinion. In a fictional world, energy shields are not an option, they are a necessity and an absolute requirement. Unfortunately the advancement of technology in the Star Wars world is very confusing and scrambled. On the one hand they have hyperspace travel, but on the other they don't have airships with aerodynamic design, or almost nothing. It seems that a lot of basic technology ended up being lost and forgotten in history, this meant that various types of devices and their more advanced versions, which could be very useful, ended up never even being designed, much less created. It even seems that the discovery and development of very advanced technologies occurred very early, causing the foundations not to have been reinforced, lacking diversity, this meant that several fields of engineering have been neglected. I'm not saying that the technology and engineering in Star Wars is bad, just weird and with a lot of glaring inconsistencies. I will also post a sci-fi image to support the cause. 🇧🇷
Ch 19 Chapter Nineteen - Obsidians_smoke1yrCommentedCh 4 Chapter 4