Have a good feeling about this story for now. Give it a read.

same here.

The beginning commendable but teh author needs to build tehs tyroy well from here. i am awaiting to see what kind of turns you are able to bring into teh story.

I conti8nued to read it and its is great

Good one. i feel like the author is really appreciating having double characters as protagonist. His other novel AIGIs still portrays the two characters as the protagonist, but this one3 might be different.

hehehe

Good beginning but will te4h two children be mentally crippled asfter losing their parents.

Long tao is overpowered. i truly wants to see ghow he is going to inetgrate narutop with his story.

The story has proper zero to hero like progression and the author is able to properly depict the scene in the context and a reader is able to get a good sense of direction where the story is heading.