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  • Desventura
    Desventura1yr
    Commented

    +1

    So chapters of Ciri at the start of the raids and whispers coming in?
    GoT: Break the Wheel
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  • Desventura
    Desventura1yr
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    Dorne is a pretty liberal place, it's thematic and you could use this time for explore this side of his. Agree with you 20+ girls is too much. I would prefer at maximun 10 wifes. And the relationship with the rest can be a bit “nebulous”. I'll give an example, Ashara Dayne doesn't need to be in the Harem, but if she wants a baby with Eragon it's okay. She doesn't need either be by his side forever, If she find a fine man to be with her for life, you can treat certain characters like hook up's or something along those lines. It's the same for Ellia, or Lyanna, they already have each other. It's my input, but I have believe in the way you write and take decisions, so don't be pressured to do what I said if you are not confortable. Love your story. Sorry for my poor english not my first language and the autocorrect of my phone makes everything a mess.

    Do I keep going with the wild Dorne time?
    GoT: Break the Wheel
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  • Desventura
    Desventura1yr
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    LOL

    "You came to ask me for advice." I look into his eyes and hold the gaze until he lets out a sigh. "You didn't come to ask me for advice?" This guy has been trying to hook me up with his sister with a passion of a god of love.
    GoT: Break the Wheel
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  • Desventura
    Desventura1yr
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    Author, ill tell you this, you are a great guy, the way that you interact with your community is so lighthearted and funny, I love reading your comments. Now about this topic i think that you can convey emotions in a very good way, it's the first time that I really felt empathetic about a charcter here in WN. Ceci is a good character, and it's necessary a good char development specially If the character is a OC (and FL on top of that) doing so the readers grow attachment to them. Your work is fantastic, keep up, really liked your story.

    "And I try! I try every day to make her proud. But I can't help but think... Was her sacrifice worth it? Am I worth it?!" she wailed, snarling as she tried to wipe away her tears futilely.
    HP: The Otherworlder
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  • Desventura
    Desventura1yr
    Replied to PursueImmortality

    yes she is, and Axel is immature, temperamental and less social skilled. dumb as a rock

    Then maybe he didn't see it? No way, who doesn't check presents on Christmas?
    HP: The Arcane Thief
    Book&Literature · Snollygoster
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  • Desventura
    Desventura1yr
    Commented

    Don't know why, but this made me laugh

    Ghost possession was no joke.
    Genshin Impact, Breezing Through Teyvat
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  • Desventura
    Desventura1yr
    Commented

    I don't know if you write for living, but your prose is almost professional, better than 99% of this site and other ff's in general. Keep up the good work.

    Ch 49 Chapter 049 – Gift
    The Phoenix - A GOT Fan-Fiction
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  • Desventura
    Desventura1yr
    Replied to darkroom21

    If they know that he is a jinchuuriki, that makes him already a big target to all villages. If nobody know that he is, there's no explanation for the hate he received.

    Itachi was a cool character in the series, but he was stupid in some aspects. Cause if he was so talented, and he cared so much about his brother Sasuke. Then why not just take the kid and leave the village that stole on of your friends eyes. Fuck the clan and the village that treats Naruto the son of a Hokage like shit.
    0000X0000
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  • Desventura
    Desventura2yr
    Replied to Seth_Vincent

    Never said that wasn't but Quiin is at least ok with the act, he did not scold her, or told to authorites and he's not being threatened to keep talking to her. His actions speak of himself and what he thinks of the situation. Yeah, let's reverse the event and now a male friend kissed a female friend, she kissed him back, she did not scold him and keep talking with him like nothing happened, are you gonna call the police? So chill out.

    Ivy twirled a strand of her hair as she muttered to herself, "Traveling the world, mhm, that sounds nice. . ."
    HP: A Magical Journey [Complete]
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  • Desventura
    Desventura2yr
    Replied to Seth_Vincent

    No, he kisses her back it's written just read. He could do anything with Ivy post kiss, even muderer her. But no, he is talking with her acting like nothing happened and didn't tell his girlfriend about the affair, He's not a helpless little child that is being manipulated or threatned by a big bad wolf, so chill out.

    Ivy twirled a strand of her hair as she muttered to herself, "Traveling the world, mhm, that sounds nice. . ."
    HP: A Magical Journey [Complete]
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  • Desventura
    Desventura2yr
    Commented

    Seriously that no one posted a pic of Sagat? like, come on guys Muay Thai, the eye patch...

    After just one Muay Thai training session, Quinn had come near to throwing up because of nausea. By the end of that session, Quinn had decided to suspend Muay Thai till he got his eye back and elected to only do physical conditioning.
    HP: A Magical Journey [Complete]
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