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MrPhalanx10mthCommentedLet's see how this one plays out.
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After reading quite a lot of chapters, I have to say, it really starts to show that you a first time writer. As good the start was, as bad i was disappointed later. The reason? Are you trying to make a second Naruto or somethin? Because this useless stretching really annoys me, it's similar those 1000+ chapter Chinese novels (Like Mighty Levelling System), where there is no end in sight. And the lot of missed opportunities. You started the MC as an abused , typical loner type who can rely no one at the start, it was pretty interesting, and YOU RUINED IT with this annoying friendship trope, where the MC can struggle as much as he wants, he still cannot get rid theese drags on him. I wanted to give you e WORSE score, but because the first chapters were perfect, that would be unfair..
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No...
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Ohoho, I feel some serious Hajime Nagumo vibes here.... Good, no.. EXCELLENT!
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Don't raise the red flags...
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Let's hope he keeps it that way...
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You forgot about the HOLE...
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I hope some jealous bstard starts to pick him, I also don't like nice girls who always butt in..
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I am NOBODY, and I don't need ANYBODY!
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Friends? A loner NEVER needs them!
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Swiss Cheese = Emmentaler in Europe X)
Brad got into the elevator and pressed the button. He then took out his phone and made a call. "Yeah, it's me. Reduce the number of officers chasing the target. Yeah, I know what I said before, but I changed my mind, just do it!" After hanging up, Brad looked up at the ceiling of the elevator and sighed. "Blake Harris, huh? I wonder. What will you do next? And what was it that you used to turn a building into swiss cheese…." - MrPhalanx1yrReplied to Remnis
Well the place is definitely in America, but the author took theese kind of villains right from a chinese novel...
"Are you fucking kidding me!? Is he fucking super man!? What do you mean he is too fast!? Cut the shit and get that bastard here for me by midnight tonight, or you can forget about living to see another day!" The young man yelled, sending the man in the black suit running out of the room. - MrPhalanx1yrCommented
Mc: "So be it!"
Blake nodded and pulled his shirt off. While he was on the skinny side, he still had some okay muscles. Lillia took a long look at her boyfriend in name only's current physique and knew it would definitely get better as she trained him. She planned to make Blake as powerful as her or even more. But in order to do that, he would need to stop being human altogether. - MrPhalanx1yrPosted
Well as a veteran reader , I have to say, among the tide of copycat novels , Sins tries to be an original story. At the start there was some difficulties reading it(po: for me it was a little boring, but after 15 chapters the story picks it's pace up), but the later chapters it gets waay better. For horndogs, there is plenty of ero scenes, but actually I stay because of the story. Keep up man!