what? isn't she an alchemist herself? if she can't refine pills herself, how could she teach others? How could she be lacking money

Skeptical! Skeptical! Sceptical means something very different! 🤮

We apparently read entirely different stories because this was absolutely filled with dumb, teen drama. Some bitch flirts with him and follows him around, and he just whines about it constantly but never actually does anything to stop her. Then he goes and starts shit with the "jocks," who never bothered him btw, because he wants to show off. Then some crazy half giant tries to kill him because he's human, and, after his house elf saves him, he apologizes for whatever humans have done to her and then befriends her like nothing happened. Of course, the half giant's family is racist too and he just constantly abases himself. It's so fucking creepy.

Why is he picking on the quidditch players though? I'm not sure if this or the attempt at romance is more disturbing.

yeah, sure, but that's a translation failure thing. If the translation specifically says coin, it almost always means a coin worth one tenth of a tael. idk why.

they were earning coins, not taels.

i dont think this Harry tried to murder his sister. He might have killed her if the spell actually worked, but the intent, according to the diary, was just to teach her a lesson.

He's only one year older than his sister. that kind of thing is more something that happens when there are several years between siblings.

yeah that's not how that works though. exercise doesn't make people age faster. that's just weird.

srsly? i hate it when people ask me how to get somewhere when there's a perfectly serviceable map right in front of them. lazy trash smhbit different for Naruto cuz he's 6 but ur probably at least a teenager. disgusting tbh

srsly, it's not like their entire world and humanity as a whole is in danger.oh wait, they are.lmao

nah. learning is one of those things that are innately pleasurable. people would end up learning things just to stave off boredom. 50000.years is a long timethen again, this is Florida man, so...

Uh, just off the top of my head, because I'm not going to go back and look, in the first couple chapters you have characters gossiping about a 3 year old kid, right in his face, at his mother's funeral. Then you made it seem like all the hyuga elders are extremely arrogant and stupid-evil. You also implied the clan head would have suppressed/killed the MC's father just because the father had the potential to become stronger... and that the clan would, what, kick out a 4 year old into the streets just because he's blind? There's also the way the MC emotionlessly goes on about avenging his parents. definitely a lot of bad Chinese webnovel vibes. Oh, and the MC was 'refining' chakra, as if Chakra isn't something that every living thing on the planet creates just by being alive.

nah, MC said he's going to make her call him Daddy's so the fox is probably the queen's mother.

The word electric in 'electric train' is still an adjective. It is describing the noun 'train.'

Neither word is a verb. Electricity is a noun, and electric is an adjective. Also, he did use the right word here. You can only have an affinity for a noun.

Investment wouldn't be wrong, but investee would be more accurate.

1. It's not obvious. That wasn't a passive aggressive insult. I've seen this most commonly in poorly translated novels, so I thought it was a holdover from another language where splitting dialogue that way was normal. I don't think I've ever come across it outside of webnovel. 2. Sure, like how you'd format the script for a play differently from a novel. That's completely irrelevant though, because it is simply never appropriate to split up a short and otherwise uninterrupted sentence/line of dialogue into multiple paragraphs. 3. No, this isn't a matter of style. It's simply incorrect. What you wrote here is that the character who is saying the second line is not the same character who is saying the first or third line. That's obviously not what you meant to convey, but it is, nevertheless, how what you wrote is read.

no, that's definitely an issue. it's incredibly annoying. I don't know if English isn't your first language or what, but you don't split a single character's dialogue into multiple lines for no reason at all. if you have quotes back-to-back with no text between them, it indicates that a different character is speaking each line, something frequently done when two characters are holding a conversation. what you're doing here is simply incorrect.

he used money to pay the 'world' to erase/cure/forget the illness, the money Gin saved over time. he used 20 years of his lifespan to trade whitebeard for the observation haki