Blank_Et_Pillow
I am very new to making stories. If I ever do make stories, please read through them before dropping them so quickly, like the term, 'Don't Judge A Book By Its Cover', Nice to meet you though!
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'With a horrified face, Leon fell to the ground, having cruel irony take its hold on him. He was the one to give hope to the others when they had lost theirs, but now he was the one to lose hope.' I think this change would be good.
The image of the building told them that it was fine but the inside contradicted that image. The bottom floor had collapsed due to the earthquakes and the entrance was gone. - I think this change would be good.
Instead of feeling joy once they reached their goal, their faces held expressions of fear and desperation. - I think this change would be good.
As they ran, the distance between their destination and them was narrowing. - I think this change would be good.
"We're here. This is the skyscraper we gotta climb if we want to make it out of here alive" - I think this change would be good.
Kaiden glanced at Leon as he shouted, - I think this change would be good.
All they were able to do was hope. Hope that they can escape this hellish situation they are in. - I think this change would be good.
Kaiden glanced forward and his expression changed many times because due to the wind and rain, they weren't able to see into the distance before them. - I think this change would be good.
The two of them slowed, but from the views of other people, they didn't seem like they slowed down at all. - I think this change would be good.
Kaiden looked toward Leon as he explained, "The greater the surface area, the greater the resistance to rain and wind." Leon's eyes widened a bit in understanding because compared to a truck, both of them were like sports cars, which in some way gave them an advantage. - I struggled a bit with this one as I read the comment below it, so I thought why not add some dialogue, so you can use this if you want or you can ask me to not add dialogue and just fix it a bit :D
Most people shielded themselves from the heavy rain with their jackets or vests. But Leon and Kaiden did not. - I think this change would be good.
It was as if Zeus and Poseidon were having a childish dispute that had no repercussions for them but the people below. - I think this change would be good.
Out of nowhere, an obsidian-like shower began to pour onto them accompanied by rain. The heavy amounts almost rendered them immobile. - I think this change would be good.
The two of them felt uncomfortable with pushing and shoving people out of the way, but they knew they had no other choice when the city took a deadly turn. - I think this change would be good.
By now, it seemed like the entire city was out on the streets. Kaiden and Leon deftly maneuvered through the crowds, even though, morally speaking, it wasn't right to push others aside when they got in the way, but in this situation, it seemed necessary. - I think this change would be good.