Deciduous_B0ltling
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Deciduous_B0ltling2hReplied to NStarYes
"So he can…"- Deciduous_B0ltling3hCommented
Didn’t think*
This paragraph has been deleted. - Deciduous_B0ltling4hReplied to Deciduous_B0ltling
Just to help more, not everything requires description. In this case, Rel having a cloth isn’t impossible and doesn’t require explanation. Hope this helps in your future chapters, author :)
As I paused to catch my breath, wiping off the remaining blood stains off my face with a ragged cloth I found near the end of the hallway I glanced at my smartwatch. - Deciduous_B0ltling4hCommented
Writing Suggestion: this sentence could be easier to read. (As) I paused to catch my breath, wiping (off) the remaining blood stains off my face with a (ragged) cloth (I found near the end of the hallway) [before] (I) glanc[ing] at my smartwatch. Things inside () are unnecessary info while [] is what should be added.
As I paused to catch my breath, wiping off the remaining blood stains off my face with a ragged cloth I found near the end of the hallway I glanced at my smartwatch. - Deciduous_B0ltling4hCommented
What??? Too OP. Also, AFTER an hour PRIOR to his death? Prior means before, so does that mean he has to wait for an hour to resurrect, or does he regress to an hour before his death?
[Special Stat: Fate's Reprieve [5/5] - When faced with an attack that would result in certain death, Fate's Reprieve will automatically activate, allowing you to narrowly avoid the fatal blow or situation entirely, you'll gain temporary immunity via the ability: Mitigation's Phenomena without mana cost. If the user ends up dying, resurrection will be activated after an hour prior to the users death.] - Deciduous_B0ltling7hReplied to Entrail_JI
Thanks for replying so quickly! Last questions, promise: Does ‘love’ on the wheel refer to the romantic kind or does it also apply to familial? If he spent almost half a year with the Dragon Will, and the time ratio is 1:1, then it’s unlikely the wheel never landed on love even once. Does that mean he has to experience enough of it in reality first before it unlocks on the wheel?
﹂ Intermediate type spell [Emotive] : Disgust - Deciduous_B0ltling1dReplied to Entrail_JI
Ohh, I see. So how come his proficiency with disgust increased when that isn’t even an option on the wheel? Also, he’s likely experienced ‘love’ on the wheel during the Dragon Will. Since he doesn’t have a spell for it, there’s nothing to indicate his progression of understanding. If he can’t use his understanding (assuming a love spell doesn’t exist), what’s the point of experiencing the extremes of that emotion?
﹂ Intermediate type spell [Emotive] : Disgust - Deciduous_B0ltling1dCommented
Sigh, as long as it doesn’t change their feelings irl…
"It's a romance script." - Deciduous_B0ltling1dCommented
Imagine the twist is one of them come out the closet at the end XD
"….But with a twist." - Deciduous_B0ltling1dCommented
Sounds like a nickname for Kiera tho
'Ki' was the nickname her brother used to address her. - Deciduous_B0ltling1dCommented
Wasn’t *
From the fact that the language that I was speaking was English, to the fact that I could control mana. - Deciduous_B0ltling1dCommented
Wth, it’s back to disgust. Why aren’t these consistent???
﹂ Intermediate type spell [Emotive] : Disgust - Deciduous_B0ltling1dCommented
Owl not dog
So not only the cat, but the dog had lost it. - Deciduous_B0ltling1dReplied to NStar
U thought it was wine? XD that’d be hilarious
"This is the blood of a god. Death is but a mere triviality under its power. So long as the blood is injected into your body, it will be able to revive you infinitely." - Deciduous_B0ltling3dCommented
Repeated
Soon, he came up with a judgment. - Deciduous_B0ltling3dCommented
Wasn’t*?
In reality, it was hard to figure out why. - Deciduous_B0ltling3dCommented
I like this word
Perhpas... - Deciduous_B0ltling3dCommentedI heard a whistle, and the hair at the back of my neck rose.