The plot moves too fast, and it is not clear what and how.

Author, take away the hearts, interfere!

У тебя все нормально ,автор,но слишком много запятых в одном предложении и это твой минус.Ты ставишь запятые там где нужно ставить точки

you have a better human point of view than some amateurs, very good

Jojo reference? Stand? Ora?

Has anyone finally broken Subaru's record?

Of course, he will behave like a child, because suddenly he was told that his brother died suddenly, and childishness is to maintain his psyche, so he somehow supports himself

It's a pity that merchant, poor man, wanted love and got a pu*sy

it's so similar to the vampire and devil system

Что за треш я читаю? Я тут ради порнухи