The_Jeffinator
I read probably way too much but my standards are also exacting so if I complained about your book, I stand by my opinion because I also probably gave you a break down on why I didn't like it.
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The_Jeffinator1dCommentedin that case shouldn't he be worried that they will perform the impure world reincarnation themselves? did he even get rid of all of inoichi's DNA?
Of course, there's also the possibility that when the dead walk among the living again, some people recognize them. No matter, but I'm not going to revive Inoichi no matter how much the Yamanaka clan asks if Shikaku connects the dots and informs them. Not only because of what he did but because then the information for which he died would fall into Konoha's hands.- The_Jeffinator2dReplied to Avyya_Aggarwal
I hope he doesn't. he's been a little too shameless recently and doesn't understand the immensity of mt. tai
"Stuff like this can happen, and I don't think that it will change the end result. I'm going to leave with my Badge regardless. Lucario breaking through to the platinum stage won't change that," I continued cooly. Stephanie's smile widened at my words and she actually released a chuckle. "I like your confidence. We'll see how long you can keep that confidence of yours," she replied, putting an end to this little interlude. Our Pokemon had temporarily put a stop to their battle while Stephanie and I had our little exchange, but both remained poised for action the whole time. - The_Jeffinator3dCommentedCh 679 CH59 (673), First Gym Battle (6)
- The_Jeffinator5dCommented
I was really hoping Mothra would pull out her size manipulation to perform a super-sized seismic toss. Grab the mon, spin in mid air while supersizing for extra leverage, and just bury that sucker 20 feet into the ground. Conservation of momentum would make that move soooooo powerful
Ch 678 CH58 (672), First Gym Battle (5) - The_Jeffinator9dCommentedCh 1 Convergence of Magic: The Overlord X Harry Potter
- The_Jeffinator13dReplied to lordhokage
golden finger is super special advantage that lasts throughout fic but author just wails on the mc at the start with super oppressive circumstances, basically turning the world against them to avoid a boring born as a God read. this start can be considered wealthy person gets amnesia/ stranded in a strange land with a portion of their resources. not a golden finger, just a blessed start.
Looking further through the crates, Pete found a few more things like two luxury sleeping bags, a tent that sadly had a rather large hole pierced through and through the folded up fabric and lastly a whole bunch of evolution stones. Some were cracked and, therefore, mostly unusable depending on the type, but he still made it out of the shipment with every kind of stone. Fire stones were the most prominent, and even a King's Rock was among the items. - The_Jeffinator13dPosted
you need to work on your dialogue and plot in general. this just reads: generic edgelord protagonist has no morals or personal boundaries and oh yeah every character is flatter than a cutting board personality wise because author can't be bothered to actually write THEM instead of just what they do. Mc befriends Hermione by manipulating her emotions ffs. what do we even know about the mc or his mother? what real interactions has he had? all you've done is write what happens, not how your character actually reacts or interacts with the world. no substance.
- The_Jeffinator13dCommented
I hate this trope, especially in fics with the writing quality of your average cultivation novel.
The teacher waited a moment, to see whether Lucas wanted to add something else or not. Not seeing any indication of him doing so Mr Cruson said, "Short and precise, wonderfull. I believe you will make a phenomenal scientist. The next one is." Looking down on his student list, he turned to a little girl with a long mane of bushy brown hair and large front teeth. Taking the gesture as a cue she began, "My name is Hermione Granger, I like to read and learn new things and I want to be a scientist as well." - The_Jeffinator14dCommented
parchment is made from animal skins and while not immune to water damage, far more durable than paper.
It can kill nine of every ten men. It causes the infected to bleed copiously from every body orifice, their skin shredding like wet parchment. - The_Jeffinator15dCommented
its not mathematically possible seeing as they were trading off nights and shelter got the first night
"Besides, Esdeath slept with you one more than me! I demand to sleep with you today!" "THAT'S BULLSHIT AND YOU KNOW IT, SHALLTEAR!" The ice Queen roared with fury at the vampire's statement. "I'LL RIP YOU DAMN JAW OFF YOUR FACE, BLUE BITCH!" Shalltear roared back. - The_Jeffinator15dCommented
wasn't that sucker like 4 meters tall???
"[Create Middle Tier Undead: Death Knight]." Ainz said as the soldier's body started to deform and melt into grey goo. What surprised Enri was what came after. A two-metre tall undead holding a huge shield and sword on each hand. The sheer aura, though not as powerful as the other three people, made Enris knees turn into jelly. - The_Jeffinator15dCommented
insane like someone turning against the tomb when they are perhaps the weakest lv 90 npc possible?
When being forced to make multiple potions on repeat, especially over a decade, the formulas and ingredients to make them often stick to your head. The other reason I studied alchemy was that I was bored and not doing anything would have probably driven me to insanity. - The_Jeffinator18dCommented
this is pretty poor inner dialogue. if she's really that affected, she'd be interrupting her own thought process to go over later, because that's human nature, not facing any flaws we don't have a clear and pressing need to fix. a more natural inner dialogue might have gone something like 'w-what?!' girl turns around and sees the improbable: kid fighting the zero pointer. 'he saved her...and i-' girl stops herself before coming to the natural conclusion that the boy did the right thing and by comparison she's a coward. girl turns away and clenches her fists before throwing herself into the thick of battle, negative revalation aside there's still a job to do and some smash therapy to be had.
"What am I trying to do here? Even though that guy is an idiot, he saved someone, and I turned my back to that danger. I don't like this. How could that guy get so much courage and not me? Instead of going there and trying to save someone, I started making excuses and running away like a coward." - The_Jeffinator21dReplied to HallowedReapers
diamonds are like boners
"There's a special branch of magic that uses jewels as mediums for casting, teacher had me studying it for a year in hopes of finding a way to siphon my magic into the jewels in case of emergency..."- Oh I see, it's a very old way of magic, you could potentially fill a jewel with your magic and construct a spell matrix into it, old witches used to hold spells for later use in these 'grenades', then you would crush the jewel and the spell would be freed. - The_Jeffinator26dCommented
Dayum! I hope he tells Arcturus and just finds another source for this information.
Having decided on who to summon, he took out the stone from the wand and turned it three times, thinking of Lily Potter. Yet, he was only met with a silent room. Harry's eyes grew wider and his skin grew paler with every second a shade didn't materialize itself. - The_Jeffinator27dReplied to MonkeyaKing
completely missing whatever you're trying to say hear as a response to me establishing that if genjutsu could unlock the sharingan, then at the right 3 tomoe stage it might be feasible to unlock the mangekyo.
This also means that Kaito now possesses the Three Tomoe Sharingan, so he can use this ability to upgrade his Sharingan to Mangekyou! - The_Jeffinator29dReplied to Riger82_8236
pretty sure the ichibi seal was on gaara's forehead. the kyuubi on naruto's stomach, but regardless, one seal we know suppresses bijuu Chakra is the evil suppressing seal and that has been placed on naruto's forehead to stop the kyuubi from tacking over and getting out several times. therefore seals designed to interfere with jinchuriki probably don't need to be placed over the same spot the tailed beast was sealed.
Before Blue B could realize it, Orochimaru had a palm on his chest, with him performing a Jutsu to sever the connection between a Jinchuriki and a Tailed Beast. - The_Jeffinator29dReplied to Flames_5094
ah, makes sense. difference in perspective and all that. I'm willing to believe I should have used more tact. Have a nice day either way.
"Onii-chan! " At this time a yipping alerted them to the entrance of the kitchen. A red beam tore through the air and hit Mokami in the chest. Momo hugged him and cried in happiness. "I em sow gled yu ar kay Ni-cha! " (I am so glad you are okay, Onii-chan!)