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This is a very interesting Chapter. I believe Talia plays a very important role in this narrative. This is a big twist I didn't see coming. The previous chapter of Marcy and that of the Omega should have been enough warning for me. Carry on writing.[img=update]
The first chapter gave a great "hook" which draw me in. I like the pacing of the narrative. The heroine was well presented and I like the way her POV is presented. The male character's presentation gave me, as a reader, the desire to read more. Keep on writing.
The heroine is developed enough to peak my interest. As her story unfolds, I am hooked at the way the author draws her qualities and, in a way reveal piece by piece, her personality. Meanwhile, the villain is not so well- defined yet. It would be interesting to know how the heroine will face her adversary. Keep on writing.