that's right Then, avoid using it too much I say as little as you can along with any other word that gets repeated a lot in the story.

Either way, the I still enjoy it 💪

I like this story from the bit I read specifically chapter 2, you have fun little dialogue, and the writing style is something I'm familiar, since I also started that way, I see keep on writing using dialogue if you want, it makes the story very unique, but if you want to change it that's also an option you could take, either way keep writing.

Another fun chapter, I'm really liking the relationship between Farshtey and Synthwave, but one thing to watch out for is avoiding the word then all the time so it doesn't get overused, keep that mine and continue writing.

Got to the first chapter, funny thing is I started on the second one first by accident and I like it a lot, and like the second chapter the first chapter has a lot of great detail to the main characters along with a fun atmosphere, the writing style too is of my liking since I as well, started that way.

I will take that advice and make it a thing then since I've been told that once, but all and all I can't wait to review your series.

I really do believe my story could go somewhere and that with a little push and support that I've worked towards it could get a decent audience, I like the direction I took this series and hope to continue!

Fun story, I enjoyed the first chapter and the chemistry between the two characters first introduced, I hope you continue to write fun little banter between the characters.

So these are different people connected to the book of poison Master, interesting plus Lester seems slow not seeing that the book is talking about his rival.

This first chapter had some great chemistry between Ron and Vira, not only that had some funny anime tropes in there as well, hopefully things take off next chapter!

Great start so far, I believe your story will pick up next coming chapters, hopefully the family doesn't go through any sort of serious conflict with one another, and massive drama break through in the process.

Cute start about a story with siblings, hopefully this won't be a heavy drama, center around teens, if so I'm still down for it

The book has a well detailed start, and only a few chapters, I and hopefully more readers will look forward to more, I see where this romance, fantasy takes off.

Good first start, I believe the story will follow the daughter or will it focus more on the mother who is growing sick, either way good first chapter.

The beginning chapters have some real setup, I also feel bad for Peter and the others for how hard the orphanage is. Hopefully Peter will find a way out of his situation there.

I'm sensing some real set up here, since you are focusing a lot on Peter and Micah usual lives in the orphanage, and raising up the question of what happens when they reach a certain age in there.

Interesting first start, Peter has it pretty rough, but at least he has someone close to him that understands, hopefully nothing else tragic happens later on.

Fun read, although the beginning chapter was kind of depressing, I hope the MC gets through the ordeal he's in, and secondly good job giving detail on the characteristics of the MC and subverting expectation!

Ok this caught me off, at first I thought It was going to take the erased and Tokyo revengers route, but all of a sudden it did neither it did some reality altering type of ordeal, plus the end of this chapter was unexpected insanity!

Wow! Great detail explaining how the characters Sebastian had it pretty good and then flipping the audience on their head with that reveal. Great first start!