TimEaterOfWorlds
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TimEaterOfWorlds4hCommentedCh 189 Chapter 189 public opinion- TimEaterOfWorlds9dCommentedCh 18 Chapter 18
- TimEaterOfWorlds9dReplied to nevershe
Your X.g is 4, opposing team’s X.g is 0.2, lose the final 2-0
He had his head in his hands when the goal that caused his team to miss out on the silverware arrived even though he had been expecting it. - TimEaterOfWorlds10dReplied to SkyLaw
Back then this wouldn’t even count as creepy, just a normal thing tbh
"Of course." - TimEaterOfWorlds10dReplied to Vee_High
True
[ Congratulations! $30,000 invested. You have received $300,000 in your bank account. New bank account balance is $300,010] - TimEaterOfWorlds10dReplied to Vee_High
Hopefully there is a system in place to prevent abuse, the system already makes it easy to get rich. Should probably be only for investment of equity and the like
[ Congratulations! $30,000 invested. You have received $300,000 in your bank account. New bank account balance is $300,010] - TimEaterOfWorlds11dReplied to Bob_Dole
True but they don’t claim it’s healthier cause it kills germs but just cause their tradition says it’s healthier and they assign a number of other benefits to it that in reality just come from the only real reason it could be called “healthier” which is less germs and bacteria, such as aiding pregnancy etc..
Xu Musen would also help Yao Mingyue wipe her desk or fetch her a cup of hot water. - TimEaterOfWorlds12dPosted
Story is fairly interesting, and has a lot of potential. I am excited to see where the author takes the story. While the story has a number of good points such as having an interesting concept, strong system and a fairly smart non beta MC, it also has several problems that I’d hope to see improve as the story continues. I don’t believe the author is a native English speaker though i coudl be wrong, so there are a number of wrongly used words, places with poor grammar, misspelled words and general dissonance in the story, though they have little impact on the story itself and don’t affect the reading experience that much. There are also a number of strange choices, background information and world building decisions that negatively impact the flow and immersion of the story but they aren’t too numerous or aggregious and I think that as the author continues they should improve in this aspect. Overall it’s a promising novel and I’m looking forward to seeing what happens
- TimEaterOfWorlds12dCommented
So the salary is biweekly I assume, might want to mention that to ensure clarity
This paragraph has been deleted. - TimEaterOfWorlds12dCommented
That’s very quick, usually the prospective employees would not be waiting in the building but would just leave resumes and contact information
Samuel pressed a button on his desk phone and spoke briefly. A moment later, the door opened, and a young woman walked in. She had a confident stride, dressed in a smart business suit, her hair neatly pulled back into a ponytail. - TimEaterOfWorlds12dCommented
No need for a kindly in there
" Yeah... Kindly how may I assist you?" The voice on the other end was bright and professional, with a hint of a American accent. - TimEaterOfWorlds12dCommented
Hear*
"Hellow to you man! Can you here me from there? I am still at the work station and the noise is too high." - TimEaterOfWorlds12dCommented
Hear*
" I can't here you correctly. Kindly would you get a place free from noise for a little talk?" John inquired courteously. - TimEaterOfWorlds12dCommented
Very weird to keep reading them saying Hellow
"Hellow there?" John greeted Mike his face shone with a smile. - TimEaterOfWorlds12dCommented
Ok so business expenses count as investments, im assuming since it’s coming from MC’s bank account and not the stores revenue. This will make it easy for the mc to become rich af
[ Congratulations! $30,000 invested. You have received $300,000 in your bank account. New bank account balance is $300,010] - TimEaterOfWorlds12dCommented
Why would a parts supplier have that kind of car? This novel hs an interesting premise but there are many strange things in it that make little sense and ruin the immersion and flow of the story
" Yes, you have my time then. Am John." He replied to the middle edged man while peeping through the counter. Outside there was a Pagani Huayra Imola car parked along the street passway. ' This must be his car,' John thought to himself. - TimEaterOfWorlds12dCommented
45,000*
John nodded, absorbing the information. "I've got $415,000 in my bank account . How should we divide it?" - TimEaterOfWorlds12dCommented
Second half of this paragraph doesn’t make much sense even if the reader can guess what the author meant
John's life transforms in an instant, his mind swirling with possibilities and the promise of unimaginable wealth. Would John one day downfall the wealth record history of the Fransisco's family? - TimEaterOfWorlds12dCommentedThe girl blinked, looking at Xu Musen, then down at her wheelchair, "I can't run anyway..."