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Just a lazyboi exploring the wonders of the internet through fanfics....

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  • Lazyboi
    Lazyboi1d
    Replied to AdamFlores

    Yeah, I suppose it would be logical for Adam to immerse himself more in his thoughts when he is out for some fresh air around Remnant. Aside from the possible recounting of what they’ve done thus far in RWBY, I do suggest you focus on Adam’s thoughts regarding his two recent companions for the trip: Rias and Rimuru. As I said before, the main idea of delving into a character's mind is to give readers a deeper understanding of that character and to sympathize with them. It’s a good way to avoid unintentionally isolating someone like what almost happened with Rias, considering you showed too much of her flawed side from an outside perspective while disregarding Rias’s own opinion about herself. Regarding Adam’s meeting with Salem, I don’t think you need to worry about it anytime soon. First and foremost, the current period of the RWBY arc does provide a nice time gap for you to work on improving Adam’s bond with his two female friends. After all, him simply teasing and expressing his primal desires isn’t exactly going to go anywhere in terms of relationships other than the passion aspect, no matter how much you try to add to it. As a result, you could create two separate bond events that Adam can have with them in his time of going sightseeing around Remnant. For Rias, it’s probably going to happen during one of their training sessions with the bond location being dependent. For Rimuru, it could happen during one of Adam’s checkups with her concerning what she managed to gather in regard to Atlas. And as it looks, the location would be on Solitas, so I reckon the both of them could have quite the romantic get-away among the snow. To clarify, those bonding events I suggested would happen in conjunction with Adam’s sightseeing, and before he eventually encounters Salem. I believe this would give the necessary slice of life and slow pace kind of vibe for the story while allowing you to clear your head in the process, author-san. After all, we’re going to need ample time to plan the circumstances behind Adam and Salem’s meeting because it’s literally going to be the prelude towards the biggest event for the RWBY arc, so it’s very worthwhile to make it count. It pays to be patient, as it’s best to not rush for the plot, especially when you’ve a jumbled mind. Then again, that applies to life as well since good things mostly come to those who wait.

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  • Lazyboi
    Lazyboi2d
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    Well, Renne did say that she's going to take you on a trip, Musse. I'm sure you will 'enjoy' the adventure outside of nobility. On another note, I wonder when we might be seeing Naoto again? I feel like this is a good point to switch screen and see how our boy is fairing back in Heimdallr.

    Ch 268 Chapter 265: Glorious (III)
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  • Lazyboi
    Lazyboi2d
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    Don't count on Naoto's luck in attracting trouble and people though. You leave him alone long enough and he's bound to be caught up in something.

    "It sure does. Looks like I'll be joining you guys after all, Renne.", Ennea happily responded. "I think His Highness will be in safe hands with two enforcers staying in Heimdallr during my absence.", Ennea continued to say.
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  • Lazyboi
    Lazyboi2d
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    I feel like someone is about to get the mysterious phantom thief play soon.

    "That is the plan, yes. I've some spare time on my hands as of late. Rotting away in a jail cell is simply boring. I feel there is a better use of my time.", The Phantom Thief responded, shrugging his shoulders to Renne's words.
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  • Lazyboi
    Lazyboi2d
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    Truly a duty fitting for the lazy demon.

    "Well, we are a bit short-staffed at the moment. The Grandmaster is still having the Blazing Demon currently watching over the kid as she continues to explore the Thirteen Factories, which might I add has become quite comical. It really is a hoot seeing the Professor try to please her during her stay. At least he is continuing his research.", Campanella explained, doing a motion of his hand as a playful smile appeared over his lips.
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  • Lazyboi
    Lazyboi2d
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    Don't forget about that magical upgrade she has gotten over the years. You would literally be fighting super Aurelia at that point.

    As to whether those requirements would be met in this coming month or two before the land descends into chaos as Campanella stated, that remains to be seen. After all, the requirement for Naoto to win Aurelia's heart and hand in marriage was to be triumphant in a duel against her. Considering Aurelia was said to be the strongest swordswoman in the games, that in itself was a challenge of the highest caliber.
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  • Lazyboi
    Lazyboi3d
    Replied to AdamFlores

    I haven’t mentioned this in any of my recent discussions with you, but I suppose the current period of the RWBY arc would present the perfect opportunity for you to work on the character-exploration aspect of your story, author-san. Among the many things I believe you still struggle with as a writer is the fact that you haven’t quite been able to portray any of the characters properly. Of course, I’m not talking about the side ones; I’m referring to those such as Rias, Rimuru, and even Adam. An example I can bring up is from a specific reply to one of my comments in the latest chapter, which you’ve likely already come across, with that person saying how Adam is simply a narcissist. It’s probably not the truth, but I couldn’t fault them for thinking like that either, since it all boils down to the way you’ve been portraying Adam till this point: There just isn’t enough of his personal perspective for readers to sympathize. Character thoughts are often an essential component of a story because they allow you to understand why certain things are like that for said character. In the context of Adam, then it would have helped explain why he felt the need to ‘flaunt’ Rias’s own power in front of her, and not give people the wrong impression. Considering the initial part of Rias’s training isn’t finished, it would be good for you to delve into the thoughts of both Adam and Rias for readers to better understand their side of things, such as what do they really think about each other and some of their more personal thoughts. Honestly, it’s difficult to convey what I’m trying to tell you in words. It probably would have been better execution-wise and made much more sense if you could work with the 1st person POV, as this is what it was made for. Then again, this arc also doubles as a way for you to improve yourself, so I think it would be good for you to focus on a different POV rather than just the 3rd person. It can surely rack up the benefits if you’re willing to try, author-san. Ultimately, the only thing you need to focus on is: thoughts, thoughts, and thoughts… Yeah, not exactly the best advice to work with, but I believe something coherent will come out from your side in time as long as you think about it.

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  • Lazyboi
    Lazyboi3d
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    It's great to see this fic being active once again after a month, so I do hope you can continue the forward momentum, author-san. On another note, it seems you penchant of talking about past details has found a place to shine this chapter, considering it helped refresh my memories quite a bit after the long absence.

    Ch 267 Chapter 264: Glorious (II)
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  • Lazyboi
    Lazyboi3d
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    All thanks to yours truly, of course.

    "Oh dear, you really picked up a stray cat this time, haven't you, Angel of Slaughter?", Campanella retorted, letting out a sigh as he did a motion of his hand.
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  • Lazyboi
    Lazyboi3d
    Replied to NO_GUD

    The benefits of being a harem protagonist are endless!

    "Let me guess, this beautiful girl is someone His Highness knows too?", Musse questioned. She found Ennea quite breathtaking. She wasn't anything like her early years, hidden behind a cloak, only to slit people's throats as a trained assassin. She grew out of that shell, and properly serves Naoto, alongside the person she respects, Arianrhod, who was one of the leaders aboard the Glorious. They were known as the Anguis.
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  • Lazyboi
    Lazyboi3d
    Commented

    Naoto: What is canon?

    Thanks to Naoto's meddling in certain affairs, many characters were starting to meet each other in such a way that they shouldn't meet, if or at all, even. Another example of this is having Emma, the plum-haired girl who was part of Renne's group, be currently aboard the Glorious. Normally, she wouldn't even begin to venture out until it was time for her to enroll in Thors Military Academy set in three to four years time.
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  • Lazyboi
    Lazyboi3d
    Commented

    An important detail indeed... That said, how did it even jiggle through the thick armor plating?

    Getting tackled by the violet haired girl, her breasts jiggled for a moment before the blue-indigo haired girl responded, patting the violet haired girl's head.
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  • Lazyboi
    Lazyboi3d
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    Be like Giliath. No heartfelt "I'm back" or anything like that after a month absence. Just power stone business as usual.

    Will get posting into a normal flow again here, to support me don't forget to use your power stones! Even if Giliath was absent this last month, he still demands it!
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  • Lazyboi
    Lazyboi4d
    Replied to tido_racks

    Of course this isn't an essay. I was just saying that you should at least pay a little attention to what you're writting to avoid giving people aneurysm while trying to read it.

    The redhead opened her mouth, wanting to question him about 'How someone who got the power of destruction for just a day could use it better than her'
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  • Lazyboi
    Lazyboi5d
    Replied to tido_racks

    You probably need to work on your grammar at some point, dude. Anyways, I wouldn't say Adam is actually a narcissist since he would have been flaunting much more if that was the case. Plus, my assumption came from the fact that he's literally in the process of helping Rias becoming better than her current self. It just makes sense, you know?

    The redhead opened her mouth, wanting to question him about 'How someone who got the power of destruction for just a day could use it better than her'
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  • Lazyboi
    Lazyboi5d
    Commented

    Unless you were delving into the specific elements that an object is composed of, then I don't think you've much to worry about author-san. However, since you did introduce alchemy into the mix at this point into the story, it may be worthwhile to open up your chemistry book again. After all, nothing beats a thorough reading experience that looks into the details.

    So if I made any mistakes and assumed something wrongly, do correct me
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  • Lazyboi
    Lazyboi5d
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    As it stands, Adam will always unironically be contradicting himself. Then again, he probably already knew of such a thing, and is just simply trying to coax Rias into training.

    The redhead opened her mouth, wanting to question him about 'How someone who got the power of destruction for just a day could use it better than her'
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  • Lazyboi
    Lazyboi5d
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    Although it's very convulated in a lot of cases, since not many can truly utilize such a world to its full potential without compromising something.

    The DxD verse is a supernatural world with a lot of variety. There exists gods, devils, angels, yokai, and even some other mythical beings- and with so many different creatures, there also exists different types of energy that the races of that verse utilize to achieve various purposes
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  • Lazyboi
    Lazyboi5d
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    Nothing is ever without a trade off, Adam.

    "We are not in the Full Metal Alchemist world" He said, shaking his head lightly "And I don't even have a Gate of Truth, so those rules don't apply to me"
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  • Lazyboi
    Lazyboi5d
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    Don't you devils have that ridiculous magic called the "Magic of Imagination"?

    Although something like this isn't that amazing when compared to all the supernatural wonders that are present in her world, it is still something cool
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