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  • David_Holbrook
    David_Holbrook1yr
    Commented

    The original version of his world was our world but he was only allowed to retain fragments? And then the world which he was reincarnated to sounds a whole lot like the elder scrolls universe maybe the wizards would figure out how to stabilize the holes in reality and create some sort of oblivion gate that would allow them to open and close the holes onto that reality.... Here's why I see possibly happening the main character art gets elves whole bunch of other people and resources including Garrett of rivia and moves everyone and the witchers back to his home reality and together with his friends he stabilizes that reality enough by way of some sort of dimensional anchor this would create some sort of interactive magical computer that would stabilize the rifts keep them consistent and add doors to them just like Skyrim.

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  • David_Holbrook
    David_Holbrook1yr
    Replied to Drarmha

    What the bloody hell are you talking about I'm American and it's too short you see I like reading novels and from my perspective you would like reading children's comics those paperback flimsy thing with only three pages don't listen to them guy or girl or or whoever or whatever you are keep up the good work.

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    I'm Naruto but why can I use magic
    Anime & Comics ¡ chainzenith
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  • David_Holbrook
    David_Holbrook2yr
    Replied to Hecate_Whitcher

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    Inventors system
    Fantasy ¡ lazy_wanderer
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  • David_Holbrook
    David_Holbrook2yr
    Replied to lazy_wanderer

    Okay I will it's so far the amount I'm able to unlock it's pretty decent.

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    Fantasy ¡ lazy_wanderer
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  • David_Holbrook
    David_Holbrook2yr
    Posted

    Pretty exciting in the beginning but towards chapter 5 and onward very slow development main character has a very very low luck stat and that just puts her in suicidal situations which doesn't do anything for her cuz human beings need a level of stability and then challenge the more stable they're footing is metaphorically speaking the higher the challenge rating they can get that's why nobody ever challenges a level 40 boss when you're still level five you'll get insane loot for it but you only have one life so it's the equivalent of expecting the play bloodborne or demon souls like game as if you're playing an RPG which means your character will die infinitely you'll get so frustrated that you'll just bang your controller against something and break it you'll give up just sit there and become one of the background characters because that character Ned let's call him Ned Ned does not have any stable footing and he'll only be as stable as a level 1 character and he's fighting level 80 characters now it's only thanks to bloodborne and demon souls mechanics and how he continuously keeps on trying over and over and over and over and over that even allows you to figure out anything now if you apply superhuman abilities on top of that you're going to have to have more than repeat over and over and over and over and over and over and over and over and over there's a level or amount of repetition you could do before you get frustrated and want to bang your head against the wall and say that this is a bad job you have to think about that balance only reason why this scientist lady is even doing the things she's doing it's cuz she's so used to her bad luck that she figured out a way to barely survive like a cockroach while the God that sent her into that reality is wanting her to thrive what it should have done was look at her lucky levels and go okay I'm going to argument that as well because obviously her luck level is so low even her decision-making flipping processing is wrong even in decision making receive a eureka moment you need some level of luck at least neutral currently this character this female scientist has extremely low luck I mean if there's a buoyancy level above water where it's zero below will offer water it's in the negatives she's at the bottom of Marietta trench let's just say that.

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    Fantasy ¡ lazy_wanderer
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  • David_Holbrook
    David_Holbrook2yr
    Commented

    You need to figure out sentence structure in English cuz that's what I'm reading this as, the thing is when you are writing you're writing as if you're trying to one to One with the voice with a ancient Chinese guy that barely knows English are you going for stereotypical Asian mom trying to get her child to excel even beyond maximum and end up making a child have extremely extremely extremely low self-esteem end up getting the child into a gang because that self-esteem end up turning that child into a super villain because of that self-esteem if you don't feel good about yourself and your parents who are raising you who help you grow don't tell you that you are a good person that's you exceeded the limits in which you said that are a maximum potential for this specific task it makes a child think that it's an insignificant waste of space that should commit suicide and destroy all existence and other souls so it can be alone in it's inadequacy.

    Ch 7 elemental control ( water )
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    it's about power (by iman)
    Anime & Comics ¡ Vitrialia_Amermes
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  • David_Holbrook
    David_Holbrook2yr
    Commented

    You seriously need to fix your structure of your sentence flow seriously you just got a bunch of words together and I can barely understand and that takes me out like I want like I just did right there instead of saying something that would connect that together you get a little hiccup in the sentence you're not just trying to build words you're trying to build sentences. You're trying to convey stuff and not just general concepts that 30 people can interpret as these guys saying worst day of your life you become God or you get depressed and become suicidal and you end up destroying the universe and you become God no no no no no no I don't understand what those guys are talking about they're talking about random b******* it's like a word generator took bits and pieces of a story that you wanted to write and span out some b******* story about some gamer dude being screwed over by gods to try to unlock his godhood to replace him because he's bored.

    Ch 6 Different Places - Same Scenario
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    Holo Alter
    Anime & Comics ¡ R4IN
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  • David_Holbrook
    David_Holbrook2yr
    Commented

    No wonder it's taking so much time for this character whatever his name is to figure out things it's literally his status screen just says four or five things and there's no mini screen pop up that says this means this this means that and then for the blank space it says due to being an incarnation and remembering your past life completely you have infinite mana due to your status as void mage or something and then when you click on the void page thingy it says void mage you're able to draw on energy from a zero point system your soul has become a perpetual motion machine you are literally infinite fount of mana. If you as a character is just exploring and messing around stuff yeah eventually you'll figure things out what I'm saying is the character seems to be from our perspective going really slow but from the character's perspective he's literally just going what the f*** is going on and he literally can't believe it I'm just saying that the difference between this gaming system and the gamer system is two separate things you see to be a gamer you have to play with a system that's constantly trying to get you killed but to be a player you're an AI controlling a system it doesn't work like that a gamer is a person that has a system nothing to stats the perks the physical psychological spiritual stats and allows you to boost it by using excess energy you give off from each level up each time you level up you gain another level of power but the energy you use to level up is an excessive force because it has to burst through so many different layers of your subconscious and your natural resistance and a bunch of other factors now it doesn't use just the right amount of energy it uses enough energy to get through all those layers of rules imposed by God and rules imposed by your subconscious and rules imposed by society into your subconscious to flow through to upgrade yourself so there's always an excess energy so instead of wasting that energy the system or the gamer system or wherever it is collect that energy from just leaking out of you and reuses it to boost you further but you get to choose which part of you you boost because it isn't just flowing out of you like a chaotic Force you get to choose an orderly path. The benefits of the current system that the main character is currently using is the character is not going to be screwed over by a system that thinks you can handle level 100 monster when your level 20 you can probably handle a level 100 monster when you're 90 or 80 but not at level 20 this system allows you to grow a naturally without affecting the environment or everything around you to attack you the moment you open your eyes.

    Ch 1 Awaken
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    Infinite Mana in the Apocalypse
    Games ¡ Adui
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