The author seems to have forgotten that Oliver is the oldest. In addition to saying that all Redhawks were born bastards, because Arthur didn't marry anyone. All this just to generate a conflict with "Cat", one of the hated characters. The worst thing about fanfics is that, the author forcing the plot.

You haven't seen the same anime as me, that's for sure. The MC is a complex character and it wasn't just one person who changed him, it was several people and several situations that helped him overcome his traumas and worries. One of the fundamental characters in his change was his teacher/advisor, but even though he liked and respected her, in the first season he took several actions that she didn't approve or like, showing that even a character of authority and that he respects is not the enough to stop him from acting the way he wants.

I don't think so, since it should be him from the first year, in the coming years he will open up more. In the first year he really does what he wants to achieve his goal, regardless of what people will think, of course his goals are always pure and he is a person who craves recognition and friendship, despite him not recognizing this in himself. The point is, in the first year he tries not to trust anyone nor is he restricted by anyone's opinion, he just admires some people due to characteristics that impress him.

Shouldn't Chien-Pao be a natural legendary in your story? By default you are using author?

You're a good guy, you didn't disappoint me, the problem is that you didn't say that you weren't supposed to take the story seriously. My comments are just criticisms to help you improve if you want, I know it was your first novel. Even if comedy was one of the goals, if it is not a story completely focused on comedy, then it should be tempered in due course. One last tip, when writing an intelligent or methodical character, always question their attitudes, questioning is one of the main characteristics of this type of person, when questioning their attitudes it will be more difficult to write your thoughts fluidly, but it will give depth and credibility to the story.

Author, why? Why so much comic relief? This keeps taking away my immersion in your story, which is already weak, almost non-existent, because you rush everything and don't delve deeper into the characters, just to make some moments that you think are cool. PS: don't take this as a personal attack, but your humor doesn't please me, I can't find it funny. Also avoid using both parents as comic relief in an upcoming novel, it's distracting if it's not a comedy-centric story.

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The funny thing is everyone complaining about Superman's strength, while for me the most disconcerting thing was Spider-Man there. How did he get there in time? Why is his spider-sense so developed that he can sense danger in another city? There was a lack of logic in these aspects for me, Spider-Man shouldn't have spider-sense at that level and shouldn't even be able to get to the place in time.

You're right, there really are different canonical origins for various heroes. So I'm just going to ask you one question, how does your protagonist know the origin of this Spider-Man's powers? How does he know he won't kill his own family with poison or radiation? This is a plot hole or stupidity on the part of the protagonist, which could be considered another plot hole, since he should have mental processing at a genius level among geniuses. I know that this novel is already complete and there's nothing more to do about it, but I hope you take this into consideration in your future works, if any.

reincarnation>>>>>>>transmigration reincarnation makes more sense and you don't have to deal with the trash that most people carry from their youth (which is normal since we are young).

I think the author himself said it was a kraken horn. There are images of kraken that could be squids or octopuses with several spines/horns coming out of their heads. Mythology has a lot of interpretation.

The horn is specific to krakens, as it is made from their horn, just as the horn used to command dragons is made from their horn.

I've read about sea dragons in a fanfic, but I don't know if it's canon, besides the problem of how he would get a sea dragon or an egg. Only in Valyria would he have this chance, but then comes another problem, how to know that it is a sea dragon egg and that he has an affinity with it, to get to one last problem, how to hatch it? I'd rather he get a form of magic that links him to the dragons in his family vault or be left with no dragons at all.

Probably not, I don't believe he has a dragon knight lineage, in Valyria not every house had this lineage and from what I know there are superior lineages, probably from sorcerers. But I believe that the Celtigar lineage is that of traders or sorcerers due to the rare artifacts they have.

I just realized that the author is most likely Chinese or someone heavily influenced by Chinese novel culture. He said that the family is a clan and the internal fights with idiotic people have already started.

Writing-4 Updating-5 Story-1 Character-1 World-5 The author had a good idea of ​​the origin of the character and the island he started on, plus he was a little inspired by Donk E. Kong, I think, from One Piece Fanon. That's all, the author thinks that a maniac for strength and battle is an unscrupulous murderous psychopath, that's just the tip of the shit. I barely managed to read 20 chapters and from what I noticed it gets worse, if you don't have a problem with a scumbag MC to the point that a fifth-rate villain is more charismatic and sane than him, in addition to not caring about some logical errors that I highlighted To talk about the shit the MC has become, you might like this novel.

Why do authors dramatize too much, huh? His super mental processing would adapt to the excess information he is receiving, in a short time he would have gotten used to it, not all the time it seems. It's so difficult to find an author who can avoid overly dramatizing small things, I like ups and downs in history, but I like it when it's natural.

It can only be a Chinese novel, these ridiculous, prolonged, boring scenes that make you angry at the author instead of the "villain". It's a shame, it has some good elements, but it will never be as good as it could be.

he only had 10 gold dragons, how does he have so many now? The author seems to forget what he had already said.

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