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Kiyo212yrCommentedIsn't it Lute?
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Doing what?
The lady who had a veil on her face simply bowed in a noble ladylike manner, clutching her dress and doing pushing up on the ground. - Kiyo212yrCommented
There's a bomb? And it has wires? Like a C4 or something? What's with the world the MC is in? At least use a magic bomb made from magic stones or something it's more believable
The black device had wires attached to it, blue, yellow, green, and red! It had something like a stick of dynamite attached to it and a countdown timer. - Kiyo212yrReplied to _oinkchan
Morphing is fine. But is there a need to morph for each scene?
Rael shook his hand vigorously throwing away the snake from his hand, it was damn annoying. The snake who fell near the pond looked up at him with a wronged expression. - Kiyo212yrCommented
Author... What's with you and ponds? And the interaction doesn't make sense at all. One second she's a snake and next she's a human.
Rael shook his hand vigorously throwing away the snake from his hand, it was damn annoying. The snake who fell near the pond looked up at him with a wronged expression. - Kiyo212yrCommented
Why is there a system all of a sudden? What's with the consistency of the story....
[Would you like to accept your being as a Pseudo God? (Yes/Yes) ] - Kiyo212yrCommented
Shouldn't it be that? Will "that" help brother?
"Will this help brother?" She asked with her face pink. - Kiyo212yrCommented
Did so much for showing off his stuff for his sister. 😂😂
He used his moonlight acupuncture techniques on himself, making more blood flow over there and h used his vampire blood arts and fairy spiritual energy to make the cock what it was now. - Kiyo212yrCommented
Tone down on that narcissism of the ML Author.
She couldn't help but be mesmerized by the silver hair. My hair was soft and smooth and had a lustrous glow just like the moon. She almost believed that I was a deity descended from the heavens. - Kiyo212yrReplied to Devil_Paragon
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There's a shower? Author you need to elaborate the world a bit. We literally know nothing about how advanced it is...
I cupped my hands against the wall while the shower water started to drip on my body washing all of my sweat and grime. - Kiyo212yrCommented
Give pay attention? Pick one man
I saw some women admiring me but I didn't give pay attention. It was now normal for me to experience such attention at least it wasn't like how it was when I traveled to China in my previous life. - Kiyo212yrCommented
Gripped my teeth? *grit right?
I gripped my teeth and bit my lips with elation so hard that even blood started to flow from it. - Kiyo212yrCommented
Wow the English...
That would fastener progress a lot, also the fact that my mana is very pure, my spes would be more potent than the normal at least.