Very vivid prose and evocative lines. The unique formatting lends itself to the message its trying to get across. Represents adolescence and trying to figure out your place in your world honestly.
I love this line.
The prose is the good and I like the formatting. I get the impression that the narrator's flow of thought is uncontrolled. Definitely intrigued to read more.
Interesting so far. I like the concept of the school. I wonder why the people with powers are targets.
I can see now the last two chapters were mostly set up for the action :] I like how the intense physical preparation justifies why cultivators are rare.
An interesting premise so far. I will say that information is told directly to the audience, rather than shown through dialogue/descriptors, which can lessen immersion.
Although the writing is unpolished, the story moves along quickly and holds nothing back in brutality. The world is intriguing. My biggest issue is that I do not get a sense of the characters' personalities.
The writing could be more polished, but it has very vivid descriptions and strong characters. Each chapter raises questions that make you want to keep reading.
I'm intentionally keeping things mysterious. Could you elaborate on how the characters are weird? The story is written in English. I haven't translated it to any other language.
Pretty solid establishing chapter. The last line is excellent. You convey Bai Yaoyao's betrayal and the effect this has on Bai Weiwei very well. I would recommend changing passive voice into active voice, since that tends to read more smoothly :]
The quality of writing is very good. I like the worldbuilding and the dialogue between the protagonist and Armain. The ending lines are ominous and make me want more.
Mostly exposition, but fitting for a prologue. Not a lot of action or characterization. There's not enough yet for me to form an opinion, but I'm intrigued by the weapons they received from their parents and the cultivation techniques.
There's a sense of urgency and raised stakes in this chapter. I can tell we're getting to the action. I like the description of the hellhound. I'm intrigued by the mother and what she knows.
The first sentence is repeated at the end of the paragraph.
A lot of new characters introduced at once. It's a little hard to keep track of them. This chapter raises more new question instead of deepening or answering any of the ones raised in the first.
Very vivid description, solid establishment of the family dynamics. I like how Rhi seems to be more of a rough-and-tumble protagonist. The questioned raised by the chapter are intriguing enough for me to want more. Some parts are redundant. For example, "I quickly put my phone down, got up, and jumped out of bed" could easily be cut down to "I quickly jumped out of bed", since got up/jumped out of bed convey the same thing, and putting the phone down would be implied.